Sociopath

Her words were honeyed,

Her smile sweet.

Her eyes held a glint,

Her hand held a treat.

Her temperament varied,

Her actions sporadic,

Her conscience was buried,

Her movements mechanic.

Her mind was clear,

Her nerve concrete,

The body lying there,

Pooled blood at her feet.

. . .

. . .

. . .

 

Her shoes were ruined... How sad.

 

 

 2nd - Sociopath, All Around contest writing contest

 Bloody - Sociopath,  Blood writing contest

 A fruit basket!! - Sociopath,  Strangeness & Charm writing contest

Reviews

[Darkest Rose]

Oh my god I love this.It's one of your best pieces so far,I love how it flows and works together so well 'Her words were honied,her smile sweet.Her eyes held a glint,her hand held a treat' Love that first part the most,it's like the rest of the poem but it stands out to me :)
Another piece of amazing writing for you Jazz! Keep up the fab work :)

[Starry Eyed]

Loved the poem! Very descriptive, keep writing on!

[Hotwater]

Super this, certainly got the old brain ticking, cracking ending.
*bird*

[Joiedevivre]

Great irony there in the end, good rhythm and very imaginative. I enjoyed this!

[Megan]

Scary and lovely, I love how you make the personality of your character pop with this..I have no idea who the women is but she is dangerous and erotic.
"Her nerve concrete" :) that is my favorite..I love her strength and how she is such a temptress. She gets exactly what she wants in the end. Too bad for he shoes :(

[Plagued Monumentally]

This was a dark and moving piece of writing. I loved every line of it.

[Daytonight]

Very well done! You accomplished your goal perfectly. Wonderful imagery.

[Daydreamer54]

Well it definitly describes a sociopath and it's kinda disturubing, but not much. great write!

[FemmeSpookyCorpse]

Ohhh wow! How is it that this dark, wonderful piece has so few views?! I thought the buildup towards the end was fantastic...as well as the end. Very great piece! You used words in such a way as to define a sociopath without actually defining...excellent work = ]

-Femme_Gothique (Brittany)

[Eli Blayze]

I really like this one! It's my sort of thing:)! It has such a nice ring to it. It makes me happy on the inside! Keep up the good work!