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A Poem by Tricia O'Brien

There should be a vacancy sign hanging from his neck

There should be a warning label to prevent those from being injured

There should be yellow caution tape strung from limb to limb

There should be flashing lights alerting people to stay away

He’s completely empty and disillusioned and doesn’t even see how far he’s gone

I’m sad, for him, but mainly for whose next

© 2015 Tricia O'Brien


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Wow what a great poem, and it kind of reminds me of my terrible ex! You should find a graphic artist to make a rendering of this writing to Patricia. Although you have one minor mistake in the 2nd to the last sentence.... you have hoe when I think you meant how. And I am going to definitely save this as a favorite, and maybe give out some read requests for you. Just wish I could give you a higher score...

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tricia O'Brien

9 Years Ago

I appreciate the time and feedback! Thank you
(Thanks for catching the spelling error)
Ice QueenJen

9 Years Ago

Your welcome!



Reviews

This is when we have to relax and trust karma.
He will reap why he sews and so will the women in his path. If life and love were easy, we wouldn't be here at all.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Many good titles for this poem. I like the title "Dangerous crossings". This is what came to my mind when reading. I liked the poem. Honest and direct thoughts. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tricia O'Brien

9 Years Ago

Rad man. Thank you for your time and feedback. I appreciate it greatly. I must say, that's a gnarly .. read more
Coyote Poetry

9 Years Ago

I liked the poem. Easy title to see.
Warning signs with flashing lights on people would be nice. Great write

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tricia O'Brien

9 Years Ago

awesome, thank you for your time and your words :)
You can definitely feel the hurt in this poem, sad but a great read!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tricia O'Brien

9 Years Ago

Yes! I'm stoked ya dig this.
Thank you for the time
GreenEyedPoet

9 Years Ago

Welcome. :)
no one comes with a warning label... just choices...

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tricia O'Brien

9 Years Ago

Absolutely... some things just "fit/fall/and or placed" a bit better :)
I dig it regardless (.. read more
Chris

9 Years Ago

good. you make a difference.
Tricia O'Brien

9 Years Ago

Gee golly... thank you for saying so Chris. You're very kind and again, that smile crept up and smac.. read more
You have talent, this is a sad write but well written, thanks for sharing,
b-blessed!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tricia O'Brien

9 Years Ago

I appreciate that and your time, thank you!
Wow. I felt the hurt, the pain and the sorriness for others who will be the next victims. A powerfully rad poem./..:)...............

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tricia O'Brien

9 Years Ago

awesome! Thank you for the feedback and time, you rock!
Sami Khalil

9 Years Ago

You are welcome...:)...............
Wow what a great poem, and it kind of reminds me of my terrible ex! You should find a graphic artist to make a rendering of this writing to Patricia. Although you have one minor mistake in the 2nd to the last sentence.... you have hoe when I think you meant how. And I am going to definitely save this as a favorite, and maybe give out some read requests for you. Just wish I could give you a higher score...

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tricia O'Brien

9 Years Ago

I appreciate the time and feedback! Thank you
(Thanks for catching the spelling error)
Ice QueenJen

9 Years Ago

Your welcome!

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Added on February 13, 2015
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