A Miracle Indeed

Just a miracle girl, who would like to have an honest conversation, with you, the reader. She hopes you find her intuitive.

SERIAL KILLER WAYNE OMORI ANDERSON IS FOUND AFTER LONG SEARCH FOR MISSING CHILDREN, ONLY ONE CHILD SPARED

WAYNE OMORI, DEEMED THE STEEL KILLER, SENTENCED TO LIFE IN PRISON

MIRACLE GIRL: “SHE SHOULD BE DEAD,” SAYS DOCTOR “BUT SOMEHOW SHE IS STILL BREATHING”

MIRACLE CHILD COMES BACK FROM THE DEAD

Don't ask me what happened that night. I don’t remember it too well, anyway. I could tell you where to go for a source. Read a newspaper article, and look up “steel killer” or “miracle girl” on the internet. All of it’s there, albeit with a bit of a dramatic flair. And once you are done reading, go ahead and call me a zombie, or look at me with pitying eyes and ask me if I am ok. As if the moment you have finished reading the article I will suddenly be much less fine than I was a second ago, and I will break into tears, looking for your help and pity. If you want, I can pretend to be sad, and let you cheer me up so you can sleep at night knowing that you helped a lost soul. Nobody ever wants to face a simple fact: Sometimes, there is nothing you should or can do, to fix things inside someone else's head. It’s funny, how we hurt each other so easily but find it so difficult to help each other, at least in the right way. Nobody can completely sympathize with each other's problems.

Wow, deep. I know. You don't have enough time in your busy life to think about things like that. You have too much thinking about the present, and the past to deal with. I don’t. I have plenty of time, just me and my thoughts. Do you want to hear any more thoughts of mine? I promise I don't bite. Really, I just want somebody to talk to if you promise to actually listen to my words. Don’t take me at face value. If you would listen to what I have to say, please be honest about my words. And don't think anything about the words that you would think any differently if they came from any other person’s mouth. Got it? Ok. 

Honestly, it's funny. I don’t know how to start. I’m sorry, I got you prepared to listen to what I have to say and I don’t know what to tell you. No, I am not going to start by telling you what happened before, from what I’ve been told. I am not entirely sure that I will even tell you about that. If you are listening just to know about that incident, then, like I said before, go to the internet and newspapers. I would rather be alone than be pitied. 

Author's Note

This is just a start. I have hit a bit of a writer's block as to where I should go next. I want feedback and ideas.

Reviews

[Alexis_McLeod]

Good start. I am intrigued as to where this will go. Is she really supposed to be dead and doesn't know it yet? What actually does become of the 'final girl?' Nobody really explores what emotional hell the survivors of horror scenarios go through. Maybe her PTSD nightmares are actually the serial killer's psychic way of finishing the job? Good luck with the block! We all go through it, but take heart, we can still come out at the other end of it!

[mattavelli]

Hello, anonymous! :)
On my first read, I noticed her rambling personality, and it did outshine her backstory, so you could go anywhere with it; though, to hold my attention at this point, you’d probably have to immediately change the pace. You could move into a buddy story and develop her a bit while she’s out of the focus, Have fun writing.

[Anonymous]

I am still trying to decide between a story about this girl and her backstory, or if it is more her telling you her outlook on things in general. By this review, do you mean I could zoom out from inside her head and tell more about what is actually happening around her, or something else? Also, to hold your attention, what kinds of places do you want this story to go? Do you have any idea?

[mattavelli]

My thought was to keep her narrating. Shifting perspective now would probably confuse me. Haha
For ideas, maybe her mother takes her on a cruise to recover from her troubles and the steel killer re-emerges as a passenger.
Or, maybe the story takes place prior and leads up to her reveal as the killer’s accomplice. What is your target audience?

[Anonymous]

Mabye the whole "story" of it, with all of the events, happens before the book. The girl talking to you, tells you about it.

[Sami Khalil]

"Honestly, it's funny. I don’t know how to start. I’m sorry, I got you prepared to listen to what I have to say and I don’t know what to tell you. No, I am not going to start by telling you what happened before, from what I’ve been told."

[Sami Khalil]

"Wow, deep. I know. You don't have enough time in your busy life to think about things like that. You have too much thinking about the present, and the past to deal with. I don’t. I have plenty of time, just me and my thoughts."

[Sami Khalil]

I like it. Very personal and relatable. We all go through those emotions and motions. That can be a great start for a novel . You are doing great.