Cold Effiency

I consider this to be my most presentable poem. It was inspired by a single sentence, then by heartbreak. I wrote this during the small rainy season we managed to get during our drought.

Standing in the field of crows

Got me wanting to fly to you like birds do -- to slow down in time

Dented and lost, you wish to become steadfast

The calm of the storm in my eyes

You say you've gotten better

But you ain't any better

Aren't you just terrified?

Waking up to the cold realities

Rain pouring

As I sing blues forever

We were ablaze

But now the waters are rising just as the fires had done

Losing touch with our deepest selves in these shallows: losing brightness

Our love is crashing in

Like water against the rocks

Embedded in the sand: I found God

This feels like a baptism for the end

Will you drown with me?

Walking around,

Why do you face the ground?

Your mind grows restless -- your heart is fearing damage

Your life is wrecking

Your heart is fearing damage

Your heart is fearing damage

Shed your skin of worry

Every cracking feature to be known

Gathered beyond in a field of crows

We are like two hearts beating out each other's names

Clinging to love like foreign creatures

Your glory I will exemplify

Would it really hurt if we were to kiss?

Sinking deeper into the madness that feels like bliss

Your laugh echoes into lies that call my way -- it’s simply taking over our lives again

Freeze

The blues never felt like songs to me

Till I held you in my arms and started singing “I found the devil”

Our fires have extinguished and sizzled out to the rain

Slowly but surely we are dying out

There is nothing left for us to strive for -- run for your life

Now just a spark, we are losing brightness

Shone with gold like wildfires

We called out for adventures: steady-hand damnations

Boy you had the whole world in your hands

And I had sung blues forever

To the sun we’ll run for cover

Slowing down in time

Author's Note

What do you think of this poem? I mean, what's it saying to you? I'd love to know how to better capture a reader's attention and how to create more emotion than I tried. Whenever someone asks to see my writing, this is the first one I present them with, so feel free to use my best to better myself!