Dear stranger

Dear stranger

A Poem by Jvonne
"

Not a poem, just something random

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We are worlds apart and a million oceans divide us. But if you only knew of the impression your words have made.

You have invaded my thoughts, keeping me awake at night. Your written word carrying me through long and empty days. If only I could enter your magical world. A secret place you created, existing between time and space. But I fear I might never leave, I might stay...captivated.

Captivated behind your walls of kryptonite, content in the ecstasy of your touch. I fear that I might drown in the depths of you.

Your complicated soul might leave me cold. Your contradicting ways might leave me afraid and confused.  Your passionate embrace might leave me wanting more. Like a drug I’m cautious to take, you might leave me addicted….

But you’re like Pandora’s Box, even the strong cannot resist. Are you aware of the effect you have on my restless mind, my seeking heart? You are the forbidden fruit I am so very willing to taste.

If you only knew, dear stranger………

© 2011 Jvonne


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Jvonne
Not a poem, just something random

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Not sure what this is, but I kinda like it. I would put it under prose poetry though. I do like the refrences and it speaks clearly. I think it should say 'Depths' instead of 'depts'. And there is no need for more than 3 dots(.) at any point. Interesting read. :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


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this is strong, even if you claim it isn't a poem. the scene you describe is electrified by feeling, self-knowledge so clearly realised. I particularly enjoyed the stanza beginning, your complicated soul might leave me cold... the only thing I'm not sure of its the use of kryptonite and Pandora's box - i don't know, they seem to pull away from of the sincerity of the poem, like they are forced. I think it would read better as;

Captivated behind your walls, content in the ecstasy of your touch.
and
Even the strong can't resist.

Still I loved the deep feeling you've whirled up :) well done Jvonne :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


I like it :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


You should write the jackets for books.....you take a few words and make a whole scene come alive. That takes skill.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Such a mood . As a stranger I fear for your
safety , as your friend, I have to enjoy a delicious
repast. As your partner in a project, I look
forward to more and deeper views of you and '
your work. It is all so revealing and so addicting.
I am hooked.
---- John

Posted 8 Years Ago


Beware the complicated soul. It takes a lot of time to, shall we say, keep up appearances, polish that sterling rep. There is no time left for trivial things...like others.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Wow, if this didn't have a specific event tied to it, you did a very good job of fleshing out the setting, so that we could have just enough to create a series of circumstances in our heads. I guess that's really what all writers strive to do. Good job.

Posted 8 Years Ago


hmmm! so deep, so desperately thought provoking that it leaves me speechless...strange, so strange....am a stranger!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Your inspirations here strike a chord of passions and desires that sing within us all... the muses that bring forth the music of our world... what is known and what is always just out of reach... the hungering to taste that which might finally fulfill us or destroy us. A vibrant write.

Posted 8 Years Ago


I like this! This could be a poem with some rearranging I think. Words are so powerful, I have been touched deeply by a writer's words before as you describe here.

Posted 8 Years Ago


I felt the passion. It was sweetly desperate. NICE.

Posted 8 Years Ago



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