The Face in the Window

The Face in the Window

A Poem by Jwakefield

Night had crawled in and murdered meager light,
Through purple panes of milky glass, and placed
A chill on me, a nameless creeping blight,
And staring through the dark I saw a face.
Peeping between flowers long dead and brown,
Scratching, mewling, sighs; longing to embrace.
Whispering low against the walls, not a sound,
But dead breath fogs and marks the frigid glass,
And yellow, lidless, searching eyes roll round.
Praying, pleading, for it from me to pass
Back into the pale, back into its hell,
But cold hands closed on me and all hope passed,
It's bloody secrets it would tell.

© 2013 Jwakefield


Author's Note

Jwakefield
Weird meter, not too sure about this one.

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I don't know if it's weird for me at all. I'd call it expertly written, and I really like the consistent textures in your imagery.

Posted 7 Years Ago


A very chilling and eerie poem. I rather liked it myself.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Another beautiful poem. Though it's quite eerie and a bit frightening, I loved the way you used your words to create such amazing imagery! Spectacular job!

Posted 7 Years Ago


You've got some really good images in this poem. As other reviewers had mentioned, it works! The highlight of it was when you described the fog as dead breath. That was superb!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Monstrous unblushing terror in this well written poem! The stuff alarming nightmares are made of. Yes, the meter is different, but effective in this because of the subject matter. Certainly unique! Lydi**

Posted 7 Years Ago


well for me it is some how scary story but the writing is most perfect i enjoyed it much

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jwakefield

7 Years Ago

Thank you for your review, I'm glad it was scary ;)
It somehow reminded me of Walter de la Mare's 'The Listeners'. The mystery element is so prominent that one hardly notices the meter and rhyme.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jwakefield

7 Years Ago

Wow, thank you, that's a great compliment. I think "The Listeners," has a much better flow to it tha.. read more
I like the meter. It is just a tad off-setting and keeps the reader on her toes, which I think serve the piece. This is grotesquely horrific. Really scary. Excellent.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jwakefield

7 Years Ago

Thank you, I appreciate the great review :)
This works fine. Excellent poem. 100/100

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jwakefield

7 Years Ago

Thanks for the input, I was worried about it. I'm glad it works :)

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