The Morning Bird

the struggle for freedom, helplessness and sinking hope...

I am a morning bird locked in a cage,

Left alone to mourn in my rage,

Like a bud I want to bloom,

But the bars hold me in the gloom.

I hear the thundering outside the window,

Terrors rise in me and I start to sow,

Still I want to be out with my mother,

Nothing in the world would then be a bother.

Thence I will be gay and free,

Soaring over the meadow and the sea,

Alas! This dream will never come true,

I will rot here till my last days are due.

The sky is now crying and roaring,

Rueful sun is tardily passing,

Darkness is lurking near to sly,

But I still feel the urge and want to fly.

Stars are veiling their prime shine,

Clock adherently has long past nine,

The darkness capers and fights,

Bars hold me and I can’t take flight.

I beat my wings on the iron bars,

Tethered in this place with unseen mar,

I want to be free and out with my clan,

But the vantage always fails my plan.

Heaving and weeping all I pray,

That god takes me under thy ray,

Perhaps, then I will have liberty,

To glide and fly till eternity!

Author's Note

My first attempt in poetry..
I saw a pet parrot at a friends place living in cage.. And suddenly the similarity of the condition of our competitive lives stuck me... So I ended up with this..!
Honest review will greatly help..! Thank you for your time..!

Reviews

[Pushkar Prabhat]

WoW!!!
this is beautiful...........
life is not a bowl of candy.......we all eventually discover that truth.........
love and close ones..........family.........does ease our pain........make it all worth it.....
courage and self confidence...........making it a goal to move forward.........keeps us going.......till its all good in the end.........
faith in god keeps us disciplined........

very well written......
i really liked it!!!
:)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

True..!
I am glad that you liked it Mr. Prabhat.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

you are welcome Ms Jyoti.............. :) :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

responding on the read request.........this is still awesome!!! :) :)

[An owl on the moon]

So powerfully beautiful and bittersweet... these longings to be free... for light and life, though contained within a world of bars... May you find your song even in the cage, and sing so that your soul is always found in the most extravagant freedom. Wondrous words.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you for your exquisite review! I am happy that you felt it!

[Kunda]

Your first what!!??? Unbelievable!! Its a really great piece, I like the way you address a varied form of life issues and all from "a moment a birds cage", also the last stanza brilliantly paints the one place we are to seek true liberty, and that is from God.
Enjoyed it!!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you so much Kunda for your insightful review. It means a lot to me!

[hanselwheresgretel?]

This reminds me of Maya Angelou's caged bird. very descriptive :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

I am honoured..! Thank you!

[Indra Neil]

a profound write with well crafted rhyme and brilliant metaphor! well done!!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you so much..!

[Indra Neil]

u r most welcome!

[jdtunafish3175]

I'm VERY impressed that this was a first attempt in poetry for you, well done honestly! I was expecting something cute about waking up early and then I got this. Nicely done, I love it :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

I am glad that you liked it..! Thank you so much!

[Shivai]

Really beautifully written! The lines reminded me of the poem "Caged Bird" by Maya Angelou. But I liked it! Nice!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you so much for your kind review.!

[Kalpak Kaplash]

Stars are veiling their prime shine,
Clock adherently has long past nine,
The darkness capers and fights,
Bars hold me and I can’t take flight.

...Beautiful fountain of emotions touching the right chord. One can feel the plight of the bird in your words. The best feeling is to be free and the worst is to be bounded into any cage whether of metallic bars or the invisible ones that we create around. Well your first attempt deserves to be followed by many more....keep it up.
Keep inspiring the world with words.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

I am glad that it served its purpose..
Thank you so much for your kind words..!

[wordman]

well it touched you enough to write this great poem

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Yes it did.. Thank you for the review..!

[Coyote Poetry]

You did very well with this poem. Took reader to place of prison and need of escape.
"Heaving and weeping all I pray,
That god takes me under thy ray,
Perhaps, then I will have liberty,
To glide and fly till eternity!"
I like the lines above. They feel like a prayer for freedom. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry. I liked it.
Coyote

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Yes, a prayer for salvation and life..
Thank you for the encouraging review. It means a lot to me.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome. You are a talented writer.