The Breeze

The Breeze

A Poem by Jyoti_Ablaze

She shivered with envy
when the breeze touched his naked skin..

He got Goosebumps
seeing her quiver in the rain.

© 2016 Jyoti_Ablaze


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Jyoti_Ablaze
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few words yet you effectively capture their strong emotions for each other

Posted 4 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

4 Years Ago

Thank you for your kind words!
I can just see it! Wonderful and evocative. Terrific piece.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

4 Years Ago

Thank you for your kind words!
Such a sensual piece! Great work :D.So much captured in so little...

Posted 4 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Paavana!
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I just have to review this again, because i felt my previous review didnt do justice. There is a palpable sense of emotion weaved into each line of yours. It is also amazing how you project the breeze and rain to expose the longing, the passionate desire, these two personas have for each other. What is even more wonderful is how you did it in so few lines! I cant stop reading it!

Posted 4 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your wonderful review.
Nice imagery, well-penned.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

4 Years Ago

Thank you for stopping by and the commentary!
Funny how emotions intertwine. Valentine

Posted 4 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

4 Years Ago

Thank you for giving this a read.
Very erotic! :).............

Posted 4 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

4 Years Ago

Thank you for reading!
That's hot. Just the thought of her quivering. Nice imagery.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

4 Years Ago

Thank you for the kind review.
Wow you've captured a whole scene in few lines, making us imagine endless scenarios and possibilities. Very well done.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

4 Years Ago

Thank you for the kind review.
What a great use of four lines. Sometimes brevity says more than a thousand words. You did an excellent job conveying a sensual moment with natural elements. Being envious of the breeze send the notion of a very a powerful feeling between two individuals. I absolutely love this poem. It's 'sexy & erotic' without being graphic. Well done, my poetic friend. :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

4 Years Ago

Thank you, Francis for your kind review!

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