So they say

So they say

A Poem by Jyoti_Ablaze





They say people change in years,
but you changed me in a day.
They say life is long and hard,
but in your arms I floated and swayed


They mentioned about the darkness

that exists in the alleyway,
but you illumined me from within.


They proclaimed the world to be ravening,
but you kept me safe in your warm cocoon.


They say the day can be harsh
and the sun can give you blisters,
but you wrapped me tenderly
like the moon in the soothing night.


They believe the barren lands can never yield
but you transformed my impotent heart
into a loving blossom!

© 2016 Jyoti_Ablaze


Author's Note

Jyoti_Ablaze
Just words pouring out of my heart, for someone I am destined to fall for!
I am not in love, but will be someday.
Enjoy!
Please READ, REVIEW and RATE!
Thank you for your time!

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I read and i love reading it
reviewing your poems is always an honor for me
rating beyond the limit ..its wow

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much! I appreciate!
sarik

8 Years Ago

honor for me
This is one of my favorite pieces of yours...such wonderful imagery painted to describe how one has transformed your world...so very beautiful, my friend...well-done!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

8 Years Ago

Thank you! Means a lot!
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8 Years Ago

my pleasure :)
Jyoti_Ablaze

8 Years Ago

.....:)....
Critique: Sentence structure tells how it is read and having long and short lines effects the flow, try reading it as I have restructured those long lines. If I didn't know English wasn't your native language I would think you were from someplace in the states, :~)

They say people change in years
But you changed me in a day
They say life is long and hard
But in your arms I floated and swayed
They mentioned about the darkness
That exists in the alleyway
But you illumined me from within
They proclaimed the world to be ravening
But you kept me safe in your warm cocoon
They say the day can be harsh
And the sun can give you blisters
But you wrapped me tenderly
Like the moon in the soothing night
They believe the barren lands can never yield
But you transformed my impotent heart
Into a loving blossom!

Review: Wow! Very creative and passionately romantic, this poem reaches off the screen and touches the readers. Nicely done my friend, Standing Ovation! Clap! Clap! Clap!

Posted 8 Years Ago


4 of 5 people found this review constructive.

Jyoti_Ablaze

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much Bear! I am honoured by your kind words!
Moizz

8 Years Ago

you simply know how to pull the string of heart!
Jyoti_Ablaze

8 Years Ago

Thank you!
This is quite some superstar you have at your back. He has all the tools! You, have one duty to perform!
Find out his motive!
If his motive is honorable and above-board you have found a keeper, however
you may also uncover a user and abuserand he must be found out early.










Posted 8 Years Ago


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very sweet,
loved it!
good job!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

8 Years Ago

Thank you Amy. I am glad you liked it!
Amy R

8 Years Ago

ur welcome Jyoti :)
A very heart felt piece, and just lovely to read.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

8 Years Ago

Thank you! Happy you liked it!
This is a very well written and a sweet write. Valentine

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your kind words!
Jyoti, I am brand new here so I hope I am doing everything correctly. Your poem is beautiful. Such raw emotion and I can tell how much love was put into this! Wonderful job!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

8 Years Ago

Melissa feel at home please! WC is a great place for any aspiring writer. I have learnt a lot here a.. read more
MelissaAndres

8 Years Ago

You're welcome, Jyoti! I am posting things that I have written slowly but surely. Thank you for th.. read more
Wow! That was incredible! There's so much emotion flowing through this poem and it feels sincere and powerful! I loved the word choice! Great job!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

8 Years Ago

Thank you for your kind review!
IN any poem i read that night is used as a calming effect for the day, i will always love that poem.

Thank you.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

8 Years Ago

Thank you Cory!
I changed a few words in the wake of your suggestion!

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Diamond city, India



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Hey! I am Jyoti, have seen 21 winters pass without a trace of snow; (it never snows in the west region of INDIA). Hope to see it someday..! Believe in living and loving every moment of life.. Of cou.. more..

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