Bewilderment

Bewilderment

A Poem by Jyoti_Ablaze
"

just lost..

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Time is slipping on the sundial,

taking my life away.

Neither, do I want it to stop,

nor, do I want it to sway.

Let me get down to earth,

maybe, I will live again.

Or let my soul drift free,

passing onto another land...

© 2015 Jyoti_Ablaze


Author's Note

Jyoti_Ablaze
Constructive criticism is expected.
Thank you for your time.

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Direct and to the point as well as it is compelling. Nicely done young lady...

Posted 4 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much for your kind visit.
PS: your username gives a chill.
Jyoti_Ablaze

4 Years Ago

Thank you very much for your kind visit.
PS: your username gives a chill.
Not everyone wants to accept the inevitable(death) like the character in your poem. There is life in death, some even believe in rebirth. A really nice poem.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

4 Years Ago

Thank you for your kind words.
Nice piece once again...
sometimes, we don't get words, just feelings, which are written in few lines but lead to hundreds of thoughts...
time spares none....
we are the followers, don't know where time will lead us, but still we pretend by having aims and goals....
many a things to say, but they are never ending ..........
very nicely done : )
Anindita

Posted 5 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

5 Years Ago

Thank you Anindita, for your beautifully profound commentary. Glad you visited.
Anindita Janhabee

5 Years Ago

most welcome... : )
A very sensual, a very peaceful demand to let die to never die, like we change our dress our soul change the body... a well crafted piece thanks to share

Posted 5 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

5 Years Ago

Thank you for the insightful review.
I like the placing of the commas after 'neither, 'nor', 'maybe'...pause-ing time as time passes in the poem's journey of life.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

5 Years Ago

Thank you for letting me know!
I appreciate it very much.
So very well depicted.. can relate to it seriously....the anguish, the love for solitude... good work....

Posted 5 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

5 Years Ago

Thank you very much, I really appreciate your insights.
Anurag

5 Years Ago

You are welcome :)
Very well planned and how beautifully you have conveyed 'bewilderment'.....This is so beautiful and i loved the thought....

Posted 5 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

5 Years Ago

Thank you very much, I really appreciate your insights.
very nice poem ....it felt like it is what i want to say...Thank you for sharing your beautiful thoughts......

Posted 5 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

5 Years Ago

Thank you very much, Riddhi for your kind words. :)
There is another universe you know, where species are not tormented on caste and creed. My imagination takes me there and yours have already visited those. Thanks for sharing :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

5 Years Ago

That's a beautiful compliment. Thank you very much.
Gaurav

5 Years Ago

You are welcome.
it is the coincidence. All writers, including me, want to get free. Thanks for sharing. Its beautiful :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

5 Years Ago

Every soul on this earth yearns freedom.
Thank you for the kind comment.

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