Finding herself

Finding herself

A Poem by Jyoti_Ablaze





Jiggling down the lane, she laughs

She laughs so hard that she cries

 

Running down the lane, she falls 

She falls so hard that she flies

 

Stumbling across it, she finds

Finds something deep, she loses

 

 Desperate for breath, she binds

She binds so tight that she frees

 

As a free spirit she rise

Rises so sure that nothing defies.







 

© 2016 Jyoti_Ablaze


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I like how you used imagery in the poem because it make it seem like I am actually there.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

4 Years Ago

Thank you Ko11. Your kind review made me really happy! It's an accomplishment!
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Jyoti, i promised to read your poem, "Saved", but I couldn't find it! So here I am.

This is a very lovely piece. The highlight of it is the changing flow of images as this girl passes through the full gamut of emotions. Very nicely done.

A very delicate poem. Simply worded but very well executed.

Ps. I just realised the poem was called, "Rescued"! Smh.....sorry! Will read that soon!:)

Posted 4 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

4 Years Ago

It's completely fine, Doodley, you can read it whenever you want. Please feel free to visit my humbl.. read more
quite unique-cum-interesting poetry!
seems more like a very proactive stuff you come to lick down this time... esp. in such paradox of enliven words.

it's, you know, always quite hard finding oneself in this so crowded world patched up with the cliches of thoughts, may be, it's cos... we're all being so unforbidden, & living life with such desolation. perhaps, "rising like a free-spirit.. from the ground... so as none could defy anymore"... is crucial thing to be understood for better living. inspirationally uplifting work. rhythmic patter's majestic as well, as always! nice imagery here.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

4 Years Ago

Thank you, Adam. Humbled by your kind words.
Great work here, skillfully you kept the innocence as well as the maturity parallel. Keep writing and keep sending requests.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

4 Years Ago

Thank you Sudeep, for your encouraging words.
Your play with opposites in the poem is beautiful. The poem is well structured and the message is conveyed in very simple way. Enjoyed reading this poem!

Posted 4 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

4 Years Ago

Thank you, Hanah. Glad that you enjoyed my work. :)
I thoroughly enjoyed the oppositions you have created: 'laughs' then 'cries', 'binds' then frees' etc. Beautiful poem, and easy for one to relate to. :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

4 Years Ago

Thank you, Marina for your kind words. Glad you liked it!
Wow Jyoti, with such a simplicity you have given a beautiful message. Yes, we should never give up. We should not fear about the results and circumstances.
A beautiful write :-)

Posted 4 Years Ago


Manu

4 Years Ago

Yes, manasvini is my first name :-)
Jyoti_Ablaze

4 Years Ago

Beautiful one, I must say.
Manu

4 Years Ago

Thank you :-)
Left peace in the soul' Beautifully written :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

5 Years Ago

Thank you Tipsy!
Very innocent, cute and whimsical. Short and sweet. But still says a lot.
Loved it
Aphy!

Posted 5 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

5 Years Ago

Thank you Aphy!
Lovely :) It is so refreshing :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

5 Years Ago

Thank you Fathima! Glad you liked it.

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