Finding herself

Jiggling down the lane, she laughs

She laughs so hard that she cries

 

Running down the lane, she falls 

She falls so hard that she flies

 

Stumbling across it, she finds

Finds something deep, she loses

 

 Desperate for breath, she binds

She binds so tight that she frees

 

As a free spirit she rise

Rises so sure that nothing defies.

 

Author's Note

Thank you for your time!

Reviews

[wordman]

a journey of your life,the feeling of total fredom

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Yes. Maybe this is how it feels to grow up.
Thank you for kindly reading and commenting!

[asr]

WOW!!
Very well written and beautifully composed!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you Asr!

[Nahian Bin Asadullah]

Very rhythmic!

Reading you is a learning experience, Jyoti.

Keep up the good work (y)

Best wishes.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you Nahian! We all learn a lot from each other, here. Glad you liked it.

[Nahian Bin Asadullah]

:) pleasure

[firabelle]

Rally interesting word play that you have going on here. I didn't really get the 'binds' ,(maybe that's me just being true to my blonde hair color), but I understood what was going on later on in the poem. Mainly, at the end. What I really love about poetry is that you can use small, simple, weak words to really pack some deep, deep stuff into a small space. I know that you're trying to keep your rhyme streak going here, but I (personally, but this is your style and piece) would rather get what I'm reading like immediately rather than recognizing a really cool rhyme.
Overall, though, I thoroughly enjoyed your poem. It was super uplifting and inspirational, and has an interesting play on opposites. Keep up the good work, and I can't wait to read more from you!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you Firebelle! Your kind review is encouraging! I will try n see what can I do about the issue you pointed out.
Thank you.

[Einstein Noodle]

my friend! ... i like your new moniker .. "Jyoti_Abalze" ..and this poem is so full of the joy and excitement of a young and cathartic moment ... a revelation ... an understanding that lets loose the fetters of things as doubt and guilt (among many others i am sure) ... your poem makes me feel happy for the speaker ... my own feet lift off the ground a bit in the wake of the soaring ;)))

E.
ps. fine use and exploration of contradictions .. and cliche's ... in my humble opinion :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Hey Einstein! So glad you visited. N FYI I have used some fun while making my moniker as well; jyoti means light n ablaze, u know that. :)
Thank you for your kind review. It is usually much awaited. :D

[Einstein Noodle]

no ..i did not know that ... you are a kind and intelligent soul ... on fire it seems :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Yes on fire.
Ty

[Nourhane]

it's very contradicting which is making it a very fine piece, i liked it.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you Nourhane. Glad you liked it.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the poetry.
"As a free spirit, she rises
Rises so assured that nothing defies."
Good thoughts and description led to above good ending. Thank you Jyoti for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you sir! Glad you liked it.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.