Ruptured

Ruptured

A Poem by Jyoti_Ablaze



The day it shattered
I knew it mattered
More than I had let myself believe

The life went on
But I just mourned
The jolting loss of the obscure dream

Shimmering light
I see, twinkling bright
In the creeping darkness and space

Cuckoo had called
The birds all gone
Leaving me in the oblivion forever

The shattered pieces
Tease me with creases
In the memories of life I once knew

Grief and shame
Sleep in open grave
To keep an eye on the chameleon sky

Goodnight to you
Dreams that come true
Are smashed by wishes reared in malice


-©jyoti_ablaze

© 2016 Jyoti_Ablaze


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Your flowing, rippling rhythm capture so poignantly these shattering, aching moments of your soul. Dreams, how they come alive and dance with us, and then too often melt as the sun rises. This is so powerfully written, so hauntingly voiced.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

5 Years Ago

Thank you Craig! Glad you liked it!
such a great piece of poetry!
keep writing :D

Posted 5 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

5 Years Ago

Thank you Shadowine.
Cuckoo had called
The birds all gone
Leaving me in the oblivion forever

The shattered pieces
Tease me with creases
In the memories of life I once knew

Grief and shame
Sleep in open grave
To keep an eye on the chameleon sky

i really love these lines above .
great job

Posted 5 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

5 Years Ago

Thank you Zunie, for the kind visit and comment. :)
zunie frost

5 Years Ago

welcome !!!
Both the flow and imagery in this piece alone kept me engaged. Wonderful work! :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

5 Years Ago

Thank you Sante, for the kind visit.
Amazing !!! No words can express how it felt when I just read "The birds all gone
Leaving me in the oblivion forever "... Sooo happens in everybody's life../!
Keep it up....Expecting more like this from you.. :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

5 Years Ago

Thank you for your kind visit! Its encouraging.
Great poem! So passionate and real talk that's full of emotions.

"To keep an eye on the chameleon sky," great line Jyoti_ablaze.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

5 Years Ago

Thank you Cyprian! :)
Jyoti_Ablaze

5 Years Ago

Thank you Cyprian! :)
Cyprian Van Dyke

5 Years Ago

You're welcome!
I sooo much love this poem!

Posted 5 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

5 Years Ago

I know! Good to see you here! Thank you!
i guess loss of a loved one ,touches our lives in many ways .
things we would never think of,

Posted 5 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

5 Years Ago

Yes, you are right.
Thank you for the kind visit, Mr. Parrish.

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