Ours

I look for you...

  in a crowded room

  in the stillness of my beating heart

  in a restaurant - that was ours...

I dream of you...

  when the cool air comes in the window

  when that dating commercial comes on

  when I hear a song - that was ours...

                      I miss you...

 as I walk around that favorite store

                 as I think - what would he think?

 as I watch that silly show - that was ours.....

I might be there...

  if you called and asked me 

  if you made a moonlight wish

  if you could share the space 

that was ours.....

K Nehls

Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

Gentle thoughts that seem to bring about memories within your speaker that pack a punch, and a hard one at that. What I like about this is how it twists the normality of what everyone perceives during their normal days and morphs it into an item that holds a cumbersome message to the soul. The longing in this piece, existing throughout the entirety of the poem, is what ties the knot, for me. Truly a well-written piece.

[SPINNING ON that dizzy edge]

thank you for your kind review :)

[Jacqueline]

This was ethereal; one could feel the ghosts of what was once upon a time. I could feel as I read.

[Donald Meikle]

It'll turn into nostalgia, but not soon enough. Somethings sometimes gnaw and need a scratching. Nicely done.

[SPINNING ON that dizzy edge]

thanks for the review. Sometimes it is just sad. Some days you think about what could have been... but the world moves on.

[Creepy Swine Guy]

This makes my heart ache. I feel the void ... no ... the chasm, where "that other" used to reside in the narrator. Something of them certainly still resides there, but there is a yawning void where they once were. This one hurts, as I believe it is supposed to.

[SPINNING ON that dizzy edge]

Thanks for the spot on review! Should not hurt, but it does. Other relationships swing close but miss the target.... Is it too high expectations or maybe .... just not wanting to take a leap. Humans and the heart are complex things. Thanks again, my friend

[MsJewel]

It's funny how so many little things can remind us of the one we love, or the one we long for. I definitely can relate to your words. Simple and yet, heartfelt.
Beautiful poetry!

:) Julie

[SPINNING ON that dizzy edge]

thank you for your review you understand :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Oh my, such a beautifully melancholy write… when a loved one goes away the memories remain sparked by many things that you two shared.

[SPINNING ON that dizzy edge]

Thank you - we all know what it is like to be hurt and how we feel it in so many ways - memories, dreams that never came true... you get it - YOU do get it - it is in your work

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

You are most welcome my talented friend.