Unnoticed

Unnoticed

A Poem by KWP

all of the air, I 
gift to you, 
so as your breath lives on 
forever

you breathe too easily 
as my gift remains unseen 

darling, the depth 
of my love 
passes the last star, and yet 
you cannot fathom 
just how far I'd fly for you

the flick of a switch 
will turn you on, but 
what then darling
when there is no initial spark 

unrelenting, I gift you this spark
to light our fire, 
instead you use the flame
for your first inhale of your 
cigarette 

naive in a love unrequited
I do not blame you 
for you have never known 
a diamond from a piece of glass

© 2019 KWP


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This poem is quite direct in a way and quite clear. Love the way you put things. Congrats

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


KWP

4 Weeks Ago

Hey thanks you :) trying to get inspired X
How uncanny that you have written this. The words are different, but to me, you express absolutely the same thoughts and feelings as I did, when I wrote my poem, 'I have been hurt, but not by love itself.'

Unnoticed, disregard, disdain, call it what you will, is a bitter pill to swallow; and that last line is so telling.

Beccy.

Posted 6 Months Ago


This is off-the-charts as far as originality in expressing something very familiar. Sometimes I do not like to read a message about someone habitually denying him/herself as a supposed act of love. The reason this does not come across as that kind of self-denial is becuz of the ending, which is so damn caustic! After all this smoothly written adoration, suddenly the kitten stands up like a lion & roars -- I adore you, not becuz I ever expected anything in return, since I know you're incapable of recognizing the real deal. This put-down is very satisfying. This seems as if written about a romantic connection, but this also paints the story of my experience with my birth family to a TEE! I love this poem . . . it's continually surprising (becuz of your bright fresh details), from line to line, even tho the message feels as familiar as the back of my hand (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 6 Months Ago


KWP

6 Months Ago

We humans - we think we feel we have emotions - we all deal with these emotions uniquely don’t we?.. read more
Why is it we are attracted to; Nay besotted by; someone who doesn't even realise we exist

Posted 6 Months Ago


Amazing poetry shared dear Poet.
"naive in a love unrequited
I do not blame you
for you have never known
a diamond from a piece of glass"
Before we give our heart. We must know. The other person has one. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 6 Months Ago


Love has to travel both ways. If it is one-way traffic then it is doomed to fail!

Posted 6 Months Ago


so sad ... well said ... unrequited love ... a one way street :( been there ... it goes on forever until one puts the breaks on and suffers severe road reconstruction it seems ... your poem has me gently at first then slowly rocks me until the "end" ;) i especially like the use you make of air and breath ... and depth ... being mutually so close to share one another's actual breathing is so intimate .. well done my friend ... Happy and prosperous New Year and beyond ;)
E.

Posted 6 Months Ago


That last line is very lovely.

Posted 6 Months Ago


what a great last line to wrap up this gem of a write.
Some people just don't get it....they don't see the lengths of love to which we go.
Rose colored glass is not diamond...
it is pretty transparent.
excellent write,
j.

Posted 6 Months Ago


KWP

6 Months Ago

Hey Jacob, Thanks for the read - always great to have you here with me :) I wish you the best for th.. read more
WOW, the romance in the beginning of this one is overwhelming. How sad when love is not returned. Some people do not realize how good they have it. Powerful write. Lydi***

Posted 6 Months Ago



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