The Ache

Listless and

Lethargic

Am I

 

A stone shell

But still

Exposed

 

A desperate need

To crouch like

A fetus

 

I wish the world

Would simply

Melt away

 

 

At least today

 

 

The dull ache

That I can’t

Shake

 

Resides

Within

My skin

 

And I can’t

Help but

Wonder

 

How long one

Can dwell

In hell

Reviews

[Wunderlich]

I agree with Clockwork completely. Very well written, and I like how the stanzas are short like that.

[Clockwork]

Reminds me of a tool song through the first half of the piece. Your ideas and word choices are good. The short stanzas and lines show the flow of life, and you do indeed flow well.

[The Mad Prophet]

Reality around you becomes more of a hell, and you can't seem to find a normal escape route. This is awsome, I like it. Short, broken up sentinces, recreated into a phrase. Different, good.