Pendulum

I have stagnant water and dated tunes
Yesterday's booze and a smashed television
Tattered paperbacks of relief
I'm killing my mind

The ground crawls with meaningless possessions

Useless products of machinery are left to decay

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I've got the sun in this still night

Watching with eyes distant

Wishing to be back in the womb of darkness

 

Stars burnout

 

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GO ON NOW

Thinking
Dreaming

Scheming

Nonbeliever

shot down

underground

rebirth of life.

Not mine though; blank energy.

Author's Note

I began this years ago and never finished it. It has changed meaning now....

Reviews

[Blogger]

I like this style of writing. Kind of random i suppose...but i am that way too. LOL

You sound energetic?

[zendikar]

Wow i love the way you wrote this awesome style you really made it so certain parts were more emphasized than others, and yet it has a raw power throughout the whole thing!

to me the last line seems the most meaningful its as though it was meant to be hidden and yet it seems to be the key to this poems lock blank energy it makes you think great poem i enjoyed very much

[Stephen Scaggs]

Dear Writer,

Very original (or if not original, I've never seen this kind of poetry before) poem. I like all of the poem, and how you lay out each segment of the writing differentially. Like the latter to the end stanza "Nonbeliever," "shot down," "underground," "rebirth of life." Laying it out with expressions and metaphors - that thoroughly are not rambling but the speaking of the essence of your mind. From a quick skim of your poetry, you have a lot of things that people classify as "pessimistic." But people just don't understand that life is composed of more pain than pleasure.

Little worms digging at the back of our skull, of which our hands try to scrape out - but in an unsuccessful attempt they dig further leaving only a trail of blood on the floor and around our skulls. I can see where you break the emphasis of thought having "began this years ago and never finished it." I've did that with quite a few poems that I find crumbled up under my bed or scattered around in journals that I only recently find. A lot of my writings are like this.

Anyways, you are a key emphasizer on expression (not that it's a bad thing) rather than form. You're a unique writer and I can relate in a lot of retrospects on how you feel (or at least I think I can.) Thanks for writing this and/or finishing this and/or publishing this and/or letting me review it. Such depth! 9.7/10.

Me,
S. W. Scaggs

[Nicole]

Katie darling, you are a dark being.
But, I still love you.
And I really like the power in the words.. >.>
^^ Was that me giving a compliment?! O_O