Lonely Words from a Lonely Girl

My eyes are heavy, and my fingers tingle.

I've gotten three hours of sleep.

I feel as if my eyelids are nearly shrunk in enough to close.

I wonder if they're still red from crying.

We fight every night now.

I don't know if it will get better.

I even poured my whole heart into a nice dinner.

I cleaned the room, and changed the litter.

I don't think he cared enough to notice.

Every lunch break he calls me, like he used to.

But unlike then, we fight- the usual.

I just want him to say he loves me.

I don't want to feel this lonely.

If I cry, he shuns me away.

If he's not slamming the door, he's playing his game.

I left my home, and my family behind.

I have no comfort left to find.

I feel broken.

I'm tired from not sleeping at night.

I wish I knew what compels us to fight.

I love him.

But does he still love me?

I want things to get better.

I don't want either of us to leave.

Is it stupid to hope, or to try and believe...

That we can make things better?

Reviews

[Angela Sparks]

Hey, came across this in my read requests (haven't been checking them lol) And the poem itself is very meaningful and overflowing with emotion, but I do have to point out the flow is a little..off. At first I thought maybe it didn't have a rhyme sequence but then in the middle you put somewhat of one and then I was like, okay, this is fine, but when I got to the last line the rhyming disappeared again. It was hard to concentrate on the meaning when the flow is just abrupt and changing.

[PoeticSorcery]

that sounds painful to deal with. nothing hurts the same way as being in love, and feeling ignored by that person whom you love. why pour your heart into someone who doesn't return it? and yet still we make that mistake, but hopefully not forever.

[Kaitlyn Raiford]

Thank you so much for the review, and that is certainly true. I hope so deeply that things will get better. But only time will tell if my efforts will help.

[PoeticSorcery]

only time will tell, this much is true. but when things seem at their worst, the only way to go is forward :)

[sinNsincerity]

Things can get better with honest communication...

[Kaitlyn Raiford]

Thank you for the review. We have been trying to work things out. Only time will tell though if our efforts will be successful.

[Bryan Irion]

This reminds that a person should npt surrender all of his or her self to anyone, love could be the craziest phenomenon in life, thank you for sharing.

[Kaitlyn Raiford]

Thank you so much for taking the time to review. It means a lot.

[Bryan Irion]

Keep writing works like this