Tea

Tea

A Poem by JaenelleEvans

My first taste of human flesh was accidental,

There I was, resting upon my mantle,

Then approached my maid to ask of me

If I would like a cup of tea.

I answered yes and then it started,

From the moment she first parted,

Something smelt within the air

Yet enter the kitchen I didn’t dare.

The cup which arrived had a hue of red,

And though drinking the tea I did strongly dread

I parted my lips and gulped it down

Upon my face there formed a frown

I saw into the kitchen and whispered “hey…”

Staring where the lifeless body of my cook did lay

“Is it his blood which colours this peppermint tea?

How dare you serve my help to me!”

She drew away with but a slight shudder

“of course it is” she then did mutter

“If there is a different tea you would now rather…?”

I licked my lips “Please, make me another.”

© 2013 JaenelleEvans


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Lee
ha, I liked that this took a more humorous approach to what could have gone more... disturbing. (Even though if you stopped and really thought about what actually is going on, it is indeed quite disturbing- I'm curious now to know what prompted the maid to add human bits to tea! OR has she been slipping bits of body parts into all of the meals she's been serving ? O.O ) Also, I appreciated that it's written much more like a story (than a typical little poem) It's easy to imagine this scene play out in your head, and I'm sure many other readers appreciate this too. Overall, great job. Loved the style and would enjoy reading more little tales told in this way. :)



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JaenelleEvans

8 Years Ago

Thanks heaps. I think you put more thought into the Maids actions than I did actually, Which concern.. read more



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Lee
ha, I liked that this took a more humorous approach to what could have gone more... disturbing. (Even though if you stopped and really thought about what actually is going on, it is indeed quite disturbing- I'm curious now to know what prompted the maid to add human bits to tea! OR has she been slipping bits of body parts into all of the meals she's been serving ? O.O ) Also, I appreciated that it's written much more like a story (than a typical little poem) It's easy to imagine this scene play out in your head, and I'm sure many other readers appreciate this too. Overall, great job. Loved the style and would enjoy reading more little tales told in this way. :)



Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

JaenelleEvans

8 Years Ago

Thanks heaps. I think you put more thought into the Maids actions than I did actually, Which concern.. read more
Lol I like it! It's wicked and silly :D "How dare you serve my help to me!" made me laugh (^_^) Pretty awesome, I must say. Want some constructive criticism though? The second to last line, "If there is a different tea you now would now rather…?" has 2 "now"s in it, perhaps remove one? "If there is a different tea you would now rather...?" perhaps. Keep up the good work~

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JaenelleEvans

8 Years Ago

I didn't even notice that, I think that's what it was meant to be :)
I'm really glad you lik.. read more
Pale Rose

8 Years Ago

Don't be nervous, you have talent :)

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Added on February 14, 2013
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Tags: tea, blood, drink, maid, cook, dead

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JaenelleEvans
JaenelleEvans

Canberra, Australian capital territory, Australia



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