I dont know what to do

I dont know what to do

A Poem by Jocelin

I keep forgetting about you,

the relationship we had

but when we split in two

i was nothing but glad

 

my heart soares high

I wasn't even sad

when i said goodbye

i just felt bad

 

we always fought

and flipped out too

there never really was a thought

of what i could do

 

we shared good times

and made our mistakes

Seriousley im perfectly fine

while your upsetting away

 

i've been nothing but nice to you

bieng polite and controlled

i dont know what to do

my life is in a fold

 

so i write this today

to tell you i'm sorry

I dont have much to say

but please dont worry

 

my mind is set

theres no second chance

I'm caught in a net

of a bad romance

© 2012 Jocelin


Author's Note

Jocelin
I'm trying to portray the feeling of a girl who is afraid to break up with a guy because of lost feelings of family matters, trying to tell the guy how she trylu feels in a nice way... any relations?

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Wow, i have felt this before. Great job! I could truly connect with it.

Posted 6 Years Ago


wow, the rhyme, the flow, all perfect
now, this time, the glow, in full effect hahaha, I enjoyed this poem, good job and keep writing :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


It's a poem. It's a song. The lyrics fit quite nicely with the music that plays from your who-am-i. Being "caught in a net of a bad romance" certainly indicates a girl that is afraid but she's already broken up with him so the way it's worded is a bit contradictory; at least the way I'm reading it (sequentially). One little o'le typo too, right here, "bieng polite and controlled" (being). You're on a roll. Play it over in your head to that music. I think it will help you smooth out the rhythm and meter.

Posted 8 Years Ago



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Jocelin
Jocelin

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