Copper Wishes

Copper Wishes

A Poem by Karen Redburn
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Work in progress, feedback appreciated.

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Forest path lined with trees

Wanders toward a stone well

Covered in velvet moss

Where magical beliefs once lived


Poking through a leafy rooftop

Sun rays highlight forgotten memories

A girls penny wishes in copper cash

To a mute god its depths mysterious


Grasping the coin with reverence

She mumbles a desperate prayer

And tosses the coin away from despair

Monetary wishes drown in darkness


Clouds drift, blanket the sun

Spotlight fades, illumination remains

Only a memory of wishes and prayers

If "hope for" had become "work for"


And a water well hadn't grown rich

On her copper covered dreams

© 2018 Karen Redburn


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The imagery is stunning...the thoughts so poignant. It is true, wishing will not make it so...hard work will. I like the concept of "copper covered wishes." Well written. Lydi**

Posted 1 Year Ago


Karen Redburn

1 Year Ago

Thank you for the kind review.
It is easy to think that the imagery you have portrayed for the setting could be magical, but alas we all realize eventually that magic is for children..it is an illusion. She know this when her wishes just drown away and cannot be bought ...

Posted 1 Year Ago


Karen Redburn

1 Year Ago

Thank you for commenting on this and sharing thoughts, Stella. So much wasted talent and skill when .. read more
Stella Armour

1 Year Ago

my pleasure ..
wow,,you took me on a beautiful journey

Posted 1 Year Ago


Karen Redburn

1 Year Ago

Its all about regrets and lost chances lol. The scenery was vivid enough, I guess. Thank you so much.. read more
 wordman

1 Year Ago

my pleasure
What a beautiful piece! I love a poem with a moral behind it. This is a great lesson to learn, and I feel like everyone can relate to this on some level. Very well done!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Karen Redburn

1 Year Ago

Thank you for the kind review.
Stark imagery.
That offering of blood, sweat and tears in moving from "hope for" to "work for" is all-too-often a price most humans are unwilling to pay.
Powerful piece!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Karen Redburn

1 Year Ago

Thank you for the review. The concept is simple, really. Not sure why it is so difficult to understa.. read more
ohhh wow what a cracker reading it i already have a story for your poem very very good work keep it going dude

Posted 1 Year Ago


Karen Redburn

1 Year Ago

Uh, thanks dude lol
Karen Redburn

1 Year Ago

If you do find a story and write it, please send read request, very curious how you might perceive t.. read more
danny

1 Year Ago

will do buddy no worries

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Added on March 10, 2018
Last Updated on March 11, 2018
Tags: poem, poetry, free verse, dreams, wishes, wishing wells

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Karen Redburn
Karen Redburn

Toronto, Ontario, Canada



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