Ferro Rocher

Ferro Rocher

A Poem by Kathy Mc Cathy
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It's my first haiku , thought i'd try it out !

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Popping in that Rocher 

The lingering taste of the chocolatey disks

it’s a sweet heavenly bliss


-----Haiku ( My first one ) 

© 2021 Kathy Mc Cathy


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Kathy Mc Cathy
Is it any good ? ..

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A nice bit of tasty brevity. Chocolate and nuts whipped to a delicious frenzy. Melt in the mouth heaven. I also love Lindor chocolate. Yummy.

Chris

Posted 2 Years Ago


Kathy Mc Cathy

2 Years Ago

Absolutely delicious ..thanks Chris for dropping by
Love this I’m not supposed to eat chocolate but do have my Lindt 85 percent dark block in fridge for a pick me up
Love your poem

Posted 2 Years Ago


Kathy Mc Cathy

2 Years Ago

Nice , I love me some dark chocolate too , have a gr8 Halloween Julie !
For me, it's Lindor truffles, of which I have a large box to see me thru Halloween! *wink! wink!* This is a perfectly sturdy haiku, especially for a first one, expressed thru imagery. For me, however, a phrase like "lingering taste" is not really very sensual. I'd like to see a highly sensory write that includes all the senses . . . how does it taste? how does it feel? how does it smell? . . . describing chocolate as "chocolatey" is like describing milk as being "milky". You can do better than that. Dig deeper! Still, it's a far cry better than most first haikus! Have a fun Halloween weekend (((HUGS)))

Posted 2 Years Ago


Kathy Mc Cathy

2 Years Ago

Thanks Margie for dropping by , really appreciate the tips u gave ... Have a gr8 Halloween 🎃 :)) .. read more
yes, structure is 5-7-5 as Dylan said....also this is Senryu...Haiku is strictly about nature.

regardless....this is tasty!

Posted 2 Years Ago


Kathy Mc Cathy

2 Years Ago

Ohh right yess thanks Jacob ... Well chocolates usually are :))
Thanks for the tips Jacob :)).. read more
Love those gold-wrapped chocolates, you've described the popping-in experience wonderfully,
which makes this a most flavorful first-one.
For your second, try taking a shot at the traditional 5-7-5 syllables structure :)
Thank you,
for your Haiku.
~Dylan :)


Posted 2 Years Ago


Kathy Mc Cathy

2 Years Ago

Yeah they re so good , like dark chocolate .. ohh yeah sure , thanks for the tips :))
Have a.. read more

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