To Exist

How do you move on from heart wrenching sorrow?

I have turned blindness

a mute obliviousness

from death and from lost 

Reviews

[KeeD]

The title speaks volumes as I opened the poem and I was pleasantly surprised to see it was a Haiku.
It took me to a place where i've been struggling to get out from, but it took me through a different perspective I wasn't the persons stuck this time I was the person trying to find a way out of the abyss. great writing

[Katiya K]

Keegan, your words really struck a chord. I'm glad my haiku reflected in you so deeply but more than anything I hope it brings strength and courage.

[Coyote Poetry]

Sometime we need blindness to heal. A lot said in so few words. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Katiya K]

Wow those words mean a lot coming from you, I definitely consider you a great poet, so thank you!

[Jane P.]

I love the direct and powerful nature of such a short poem. Also, great work hitting the sensory motors, as the first two lines stress an absence of sight and sound, really leaving the reader feeling that sense of bleakness. The tone is dramatic and abrupt, instantly capturing the audience's attention. The final line, "from death and from lost" really emphasises how I felt reading the poem. The abruptness left me feeling a little lost, which is a good thing! It's short and hard hitting. Congratulations on such a powerful piece!

Ps. I'm also getting to your novels, I just really needed to let you know how much I enjoyed this!

[Katiya K]

Hi Jane, thank you for taking the time to read this and for a such a lovely review. I always smile when reading reviews like yours and I'm glad to know I was able to properly convey emotion through three short lines >.<

I hope you like my novels as well...I know they are long and take time to read.

[Lamis]

It amazes me how three lines can mean this much, like they leave a door open for you..
Well done!

[Katiya K]

thank you Lamees!

[Writer #00]

Just one thing: the first line currently has four syllables, to have five, just add an accent over the e in 'turned' so that it will be pronounced 'turn-ed'. : )

I had trouble understanding this on the first read, because it seems to be incomplete. The reader thinks it is going to be told what the narrator turns this blindness into, but it just ends. i think, after re-re-re-reading it, that it is saying that many people are imperceptive of or ignore things related to death/ the truth of the inevitability of death and of the lost (which, from a spiritual standpoint, is even more meaningful), but the narrator turned the blindness, the ignorance, from these things so that they are seen in peoples' eyes as what they are and, in the case of the lost, something can be done about them. Well done, and very thought-provoking.

[Katiya K]

Writer, thank you for taking the time to re re re read my haiku!! I'm glad it hooked you enough to not give up on it. ALSO, thank you for finding that mistake for me that I overlooked. You're right turned is only one syllable >.<

When I write a haiku, I often try to make it so that even the simplest of words or a line can relate to many things. So I leave some of the lines open to the readers imagination and thought. What is so horrifying/painful/sad that someone would want to be blind from it? It is simple and complicated. I wrote this in thinking, how do people move on from such an painful/horrifying/sad event. Do they simply exist as a ghost in a shell? Or do they simply get up and move on?

Thank you for taking the time to read and leave such a helpful review :)

[Writer #00]

No problem, and thanks for explaining your thoughts behind writing it (I always like to know what the author was thinking). Thanks for sharing your haiku : )

[Katiya K]

:) You are very welcome and you are so sweet!

[SquinklaPsyOps]

It sounds like spirits from the dead can't speak, doubt it.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

I like the form of the haiku here... the structure... and the plot lines... makes one ponder and relish the short verses of art...

[Katiya K]

Thank you for your kind and thoughtful words. I am glad it makes the reader ponder!

[Joshua Hunter]

very nice, so few words but very great!

[Katiya K]

Thank you josh!

[Samuel Jack]

Watching lost does that to me too!
Only joking, excellent Japanese style poem, I found the meaning quite cryptic, but that's what makes these little poems fun, when you say a lot in a small amount of words. Keep up the good work!

[Katiya K]

Heh heh heh you silly! Thank you for the read :)

[Ravyne Hawke]

Very nice poem, Katiya. You say much with so few lines. I wonder, have you ever written Haiku or Senyru?

[Katiya K]

Hi Lori, I've written Haiku's before yes! Thank you for the read :)

[Ravyne Hawke]

I thought you must.. it seems you have a knack for minimalism