Hopelessness

Hopelessness

A Poem by Kay Salisu Titilola
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Right from the wilderness of pain,
across the jungle of hopelessness,
arose the cries of the fainting
sounding through the mouth of distress.

Dismay opened wide his gate
dragging in the feet of his captives
strongly hypnotizing their fates
and making chaotic their living.

Restless souls awaiting stays
hum-humming songs of the ages
as their legs wobble in pain
along with the mystery of nothing.

Oh! Who will save the world
from this daily striking storm?
A breeze blowing unceasing punch,
Even the strong are getting drowned.

© 2020 Kay Salisu Titilola


Author's Note

Kay Salisu Titilola
Just felt like writing this.
What do you think of it?

It has been a long time, writers.

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We need to save ourselves and then we can save the world....well written🌹

Posted 4 Months Ago


Kay Salisu Titilola

4 Months Ago

That's true, Kelly.
The world in in our hands to save but it seems like nobody wants to make .. read more
i like the personification...and the allusions to a great storm or fire...damage to earth, to people...to souls...
a breeze is just a prelude to a strong wind...and destruction.
j.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Kay Salisu Titilola

4 Months Ago

Thank you for your wonderful point of view sir.
Sounds like a scene from Dante's hell. I believe it reflects the unhappiness of the world, the continuing heartbreak from which many suffer. It ends on a grim note, indicating that even the strong are being borne under. Somber stuff.

Consider these suggestions: in verse 1, change faints to fainting. In verse 3, take the s off wobbles. In verse 4, put an ed on the last word.

Posted 4 Months Ago


Kay Salisu Titilola

4 Months Ago

Thank you so much, John.
I've done the corrections.
I really appreciate.

I think every one of us thinks and feels this way once in a while and given the pace of change, and all that is happening in the world, is it any wonder... Good to have you back y friend... Just don't let them grind ya down....

Neville

Posted 4 Months Ago


Kay Salisu Titilola

4 Months Ago

Thank you, Neville.
I'll be careful.
Neville

4 Months Ago


Good to hear.....
I'm glad you're back posting new writing! This is a very powerful message that's right for our times. Many feel hopeless about the way this world is going & your poem expresses this with many dynamic word choices that convey the pounding strangling insurmountable despair. It's interesting that your message is written in a powerful way, describing the feelings of being powerless. I love contrasts (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 4 Months Ago


Kay Salisu Titilola

4 Months Ago

Thank you so much Margie.
I'm glad to hear from you again.
Your words are really cons.. read more
Dismay opened wide his gate
dragging in the feet of his captives...

and I’m already in. The personification is so well done and sets the mood for a desolate cry to the universe. I could hear the hum even before it catches up to me in the next stanza. (In my mind, I heard it as a Soweto choir hum, but that’s just me). We are deposited at the mystery of nothing.

Beautiful and strong!!!

A



Posted 4 Months Ago


Kay Salisu Titilola

4 Months Ago

Hello Adichie.
I'm glad you stopped by to give this wonderful review.
I really appreci.. read more
adichie

4 Months Ago

Oh, my pleasure!!! :):)

A
Good to see a new post from you Kay. Welcome back. When even the strong are getting drowned, you realise what difficult times we live in. If the strong are struggling, what hope for the weaker members of society. Who will save the world indeed. Plenty to think about here. Multi layered.

Chris

Posted 4 Months Ago


Kay Salisu Titilola

4 Months Ago

Yeah, thank you Chris.
It's a pleasure to hear from you again.
And I'm glad for your .. read more

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Kay Salisu Titilola
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