Black Water Lilies

It's not so bad this soul asylum

Like my own personal island 

Where being insane is part of the game

and the worlds so far away

So here I go still staring at these same old walls

My body feels young but my mind feels old

The birds sing a sweet hello

Inviting me to lands I wish to go

My voices try and echo the tone of my surroundings

I'm lost and found but I don't feel down

At this moment I feel alive

Till the sedation cuts a cruel rendition of my life

If I keep running maybe I'll find a door

and they'll cheer for me, "warrior!"

Or strap me up in a white embrace

Entrapped in this forsaken place

If I can let love conqueror their minds

They will know that I wish to go

But they can't see, they're completely blind

And I've made peace with my abandoned state

Come visit me, will you please?

           Let's dance on the river before we go under

  a blanket of black water lilies

  Disappearing into my disease

Author's Note

Reviews

[Mari' Emeraude]

Oooo, dark and brooding, this has a very mysterious quality about it.

[lightsong]

You made my heart smiles warmly, and touch me in a private place, I always had my own soul asylum, and ever lived in my own world, not easy when people will come to lecture You about it, and make You feel You are wrong, or sick or etc... BUT I didn't listen, and I kept living inside it, exactly like You, a dreamland, a fairlyland... where Your words paint this whole world, create it, make it alive... thank You for the journey my friend, for Your wonderful personal poem, for the chilling song, and for sharing You with all of us.

[KeeD]

Thank you for getting me

[lightsong]

You are welcome my friend, this sentence what most hit me deep, since I know exactly what it means, to be a little boy with a mature mind...

"My body feels young but my mind feels old"

[Ardra]

soul asylum
Like my own personal island

Ah ... :)
Always wished to run away to an island which is far away...after reading your poem...kind of feel like why run when we have our own island within us isn't it....

Shades of grey make this more worth reading...
I like this one...it speaks to me on a personal level... :)

[KeeD]

I like the idea of yours when you say we all have our own island within us! It's like we always want to escape ourselves but what if we are the escape, it's a positive refreshing way to look at life.

[barleygirl]

I really love your writing. You do a great crafting of rhyme & rhythm in a melodic way, such that I’m somewhat singing in my mind as I read. I like to write whimsical “escape” pieces & so I very much gravitate to your playful whimsy, even when addressing a mood that’s bleak or forsaken. I like your imagination & slight sense of outlandishness as you describe things with abandon (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[KeeD]

Thanks so much Margie, this was a really wonderful review.

[ms. barrie]

truly riveting piece, love the
compelling in depth complexity of the psyche
always a unique, haunting ink from you!! enjoyed the lyrical movement, and phraseology.

... i think we all a little insanity, at times...opens up your third eye.
~ X

[KeeD]

Thanks Barrie! No one does lyrics like you girl. :D

[ms. barrie]

you’re welcome, and many thank yous...namaste, x

[Butch Decatoria]

Dark and still a lovely piece of write. Almost felt like a metallic rock anthem deeply brooding, kudos to cool, peace and Thank you.

[KeeD]

Thanks Butch!

[Chris Shaw]

Haunting music and your words have the same effect. Lyrical writer. Final stanza, superb.

Chris

[KeeD]

Thank you, I wish I could write lyrics for people to perform to but unfortunately i'm kind of tone deaf haha

[Chris Shaw]

Same here. Can't sing for toffees.

[KeeD]

I'll sing, whether you like it or not i'm still taking the toffees haha.

[Chris Shaw]

:)) ...

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you have a way with words!!! You deserve peace if not freedom. Good write

[KeeD]

Thank you for the sweet review

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Wonderful- insane is part of the game- I fully agree- insane is sanity in its highest form and yes the world is far far away- the soul if we truly know it is set apart from this here and now and we look from the outside in waiting for all truth to be revealed- excellent write🌹

[KeeD]

Thanks so much, I feel like you understand my poems soul.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Yes I do and they are wonderful to read taking you deeper and higher- 🌹

[Sami Khalil]

My friend: You have the style and you have the power of words. Your portray the struggle marvelously, the abandoned state, the flight state...You want the connection, you desire the peace. I like how you use the word (rendition) for it had its political time with George Bush Jr.
Keep sharing your poetic marvel.

[KeeD]

Thank you for getting the internal turmoil that is this piece. If not freedom i'll settle for peace, you've summed it up beautifully.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome either way.