Gedankenexperiments

Thought Experiments

 

Stained glass words that crack

the chords of unsightly lack

in shattered folly shoaling

a lost, along, a holding .

 

Flatly wiping out

all this is contrived about

instead of ideas complete

theoretical defeat

.

If lightly slippered thought

distil directions sought

then a weeping gives it seems

no seeking sleep in schemes.

 

Tonight be on my bed,

around my head instead

to frank contort the shape

protect complete the fate

 

Yet for a portion lie

delivered or you die

and confused failed that you be

is not what others see

 

for glass if splintered break

all must now hesitate

complete the words now down

another one for frown

 

Despond delivered free

without complexity

the fissures of this mind

are what you left behind

 

another as you wished

other blankets kissed

a fool, a hope, a thief

see through the thoughts belief

 

conundrum of your life

complete with endless strife

coupled with the vex

of always when to stretch

 

in simple terms it might

be yes and always right

investigate the fools

who never break the rules

 

believe your creativity

relapsing sanity

and if you are allowed

shout all you can this loud

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[emmajoy]

This is almost a newly found manuscript by Shakespeare or the like! I love the phrasing, the way you've created an atmosphere of time

'Despond delivered free / without complexity / the fissures of this mind /are what you left behind'

I must find out what the title means, - danken = to thank in German ?.. more than that... maybe it's a form of writing... ignorant > me

Nonetheless, it impresses me in what I see as being very different from the norm. Makes me think of sonnets and past time. It has a ring to it.

Thank you for the introduction into another shape and time, skill and beauty!

[R J Askew]

I like the image of 'stained glass words'. I also like 'lightly slippered thought' ... this I read in the sense of giving them a little beating. 'believe your creativity' had me smiling. I dunno if I would trust mind. but then I dunno if I trust my reason either. in the in I conclude it is better not to need to trust.

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Bravo! I could not agree more with the ending especially. Great descriptive work that truly is very enticing and intriquing. A new favorite of mine. Thank you for sharing your talent once again. Delightful.
Light,
Siddartha

[W.k.kortas]

You've done this but it can't be done and yet I've read it and....damnit, man, I can never tell when you're kidding! I read the final two stanzas, and I don't know if you're laughing with us or at us.

[holly]

"in simple terms it might
be yes and always right" I remember falling in love with words just for the sound of them when I read Joyce's "Ulysses". I got that same sensation reading this.

[Gandré]

I liked the A-A B-B versification. guilt, angst ? But forgiveness, transcience and doubt. Everything will be good! love. lara gandr�

[Emily B]

I was glad to find your words today. In fact, I imagine I will read them again before I go back to work just because . . . I'm not sure why I find myself in my current mood.

Clouds pass
words march on
living is
inexorable
most days