To Hold Someone's Hand

Explains people who want control over your life

I'm lost in my thoughts,

Drowned by my heart,

Waiting for him to come,

And save me from tearing apart,

I'm wandering in black,

Without a lead,

My legs grow tired,

And I fall to my knees,

All this time was lonely,

Filled with nothing but scares,

Haunted by the outside world,

And my erotic nightmares,

I see sparkling silver,

Far in the dark clouds,

I want its shine, its luster,

Its brilliance, its amazement,

Its glamor and everything else it could muster,

But it's slowly clouding,

And withering away,

It doesn't want to come back,

It doesn't want to stay,

I find someone new,

Later on after I've healed,

Yet, the one I used to love,

Doesn't care about how I feel,

I don't want to let him go,

Yet, my happiness bothers him so,

He wants to be friends,

I don't understand,

He doesn't want me to love,

Or To Hold Someone's Hand...

Reviews

[Knight in Armor]

I agree with Grant; your command of imagery is incredibly impressive, as is the rhyme scheme of your piece. The only thing I could think of that could use any kind of improvement would be some possible clarification on the timing of this. Definitely an excellent poem.

[Grant]

I love the way you have with words within this poem. I can actually see what you are talking about.