Caged inside the body

SHE: 'S is silent'

She wore wine red lipstick today, perhaps that’s a transparent bra behind the wide neck top.
Her hair so silky smooth, he craved for a touch. His eyes followed her every step. His lips would part and tongue curled to know about her moisturisers and creams. He would give a limb to be a part of the kitty parties she would attend.
Hoping he could emulate the lady gait if he ever got to be as elegantly dressed as she was someday. Maybe that would be what the men would like. Men who would like him.

Author's Note

I would love to get constructive feedback from you <3

Reviews

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Beauty in the eye of the beholder- some love others more than themselves and wish to be another- sad- we all need to accept ourselves and love ourselves as we are- not easy but sad living a life longing to be like another- interesting write- could have two meanings- well written🌹

[Kichu]

I am happy that you interpreted the story well. Thank you for the review.

[&lsquo;Thoughts In Time&rsquo;&#127801;]

Pleasure🌹🌹🌹

[Ruby Heggie (PB Jacobs)]

Hi! Your word choice is upoery enough, and I see enough adjectives in your content, but why don't you write more about this?

[Chris Shaw]

Your title is a good one. Your story on the short side but it is well written from the perspective of a man wishing he could step into the stilettoed shoes of a woman. The description of that woman was handled well, her every movement being examined with curiosity and envy. Needs to be fleshed out more.

Chris

[barleygirl]

I haven't read anything that comes close to touching the trans message, here on this website! I love the subtle way you approach this . . . it's a convincing rendition of how it might feel to be in some man shoes wishing he/she was in stilettos. My only complaint is that this is too short & not as developed as it could be. I find myself longing for much more detailed imagery that appeals to all the senses . . . what is that specific scent that he/she would like to share? What is the color & texture of lady clothing that makes it so different & so appealing to such a person longing to be a woman? There's so much more you could do to pump this up. But it's really beautiful & meaningful just the way it is, too (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Kichu]

Often the biggest challenge of 100 word story is deciding what to keep and what to remove from the story so as to deliver the maximum impact. I don't mind if the reader feels incomplete at the end of the story and longing for more, just giving someone a sip of the sweetest nectar before slithering away from their grasp. It is cruel but also a sadistic pleasure that I get. It just goes to show that the reader does care and is fully invested in the story. And in bringing them to their knees, I have succeeded as a writer.
Lots of HUGS Margie. I love to see your comments on my blog. Keeps me going and keeps me working hard.