Empty grave, empty me

Empty grave, empty me

A Poem by M.Kilani

 

My grave.. run to embrace me

No longer I want to be free


My grave from pain my soul spare

Feed me dust instead of air


Take me away from this hideous life

As I have no strength for a thousand knife


It doesn't matter die young or old

Though I'm burning I feel so cold

 

My grave.. run and embrace me

For my friends in need have left me


My grave. hold me closer as no one is here but me

She went away with him left and abandoned me


Can't change my self my grave .life is changing me

Dies who I am now .. and dies who they want me to be

© 2010 M.Kilani


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I'm sorry but the punctuation and the struggle to find a rhyme is annoying, but that doesn't mean it's bad. You still presented that tangible need to meet an untimely death!

Posted 4 Years Ago


ok... the emotion mate is strong!
but the repetition in rhyme scheme isn't your best!
but... its ok!
be well mate!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Not bad. Reminds me of some of my own older writings... while the yearning for the grave may be a bit extreme, it vividly serves as a metaphor for burial, as we must do with some of the more painful memories...

Posted 10 Years Ago


there is power in your closing line very good poem

Posted 10 Years Ago


I like it it's cool. And what author doesn't write about death sooner or latter. But I do love the expressions you write in your writing. They're always so fantastic. Good job!

Posted 10 Years Ago


A longing for death could mean a broken self-defeated soul.
One of the things i like in this poem is the "love" for death portrayed here. A very melancholic "love" =)

Posted 10 Years Ago


We can fall into a grave of depression and desire to be left alone. But it isn't that easy. Better to fight and be strong then give in to a lonely grave. A powerful poem with a sad story. A excellent poem.
Coyote


Posted 10 Years Ago


an old poem I wrote when I was 17

Posted 10 Years Ago



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Added on September 4, 2010
Last Updated on September 5, 2010
Tags: Death, suicide, grave

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M.Kilani

Amman, Jordan



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