Through These Eyes

Through These Eyes

A Poem by Alex Vidmar

I see things...
Spirits, hatred, love, anger.
People, animals, safety, and danger.
I see these things.

I've seen,
Death, Life, Sadness, pain.
Fire, earth, wind, and rain.
These things I've seen.

I want to see...
The face of a newborn, the smile of a lover,
Happiness throughout the world,  And a world without hunger.
These I want to see.

I will never see...
A world without pain, nor the year 3000.
The smile of one long gone, nor the face of my great-great-great-granddaughter's husband.
These, I shall never see.

© 2012 Alex Vidmar


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Alex Vidmar
Just wrote this in 5 minutes. What'd'ya think?

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For five minutes, this is exceptionally done. I've really never thought about not seeing the year 3000 or my descendants fiancees, but you're absolutely correct. The only thing I have to say critique-wise is just that it doesn't seem finished, almost as if there's something important you're missing. Good job though!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Wow, for a 5 minutes write this is EXCELLENT!! I loved the rhythm it creates as you read it out loud, and the imagery is just wonderful.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

For five minutes, this is exceptionally done. I've really never thought about not seeing the year 3000 or my descendants fiancees, but you're absolutely correct. The only thing I have to say critique-wise is just that it doesn't seem finished, almost as if there's something important you're missing. Good job though!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

WOW! Takes me five minutes to get my brain focused on the page....this was great

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kiss the earth we are here now. still and again.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I think all of us wants to see a fresh new world without any problems, anyway great poem it has it's dark feeling, great job

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A 5 minutes well spent. Who says you have to sit down for hours and compose a brilliant poem. This is great. I love the way you penned each stanza, " the things I see, Things I've seen, things I want to see, things I will never see. A clever poem and great work.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Alex Vidmar

8 Years Ago

Thank you.
This is very good. I like this. It is something a lot of people can relate to

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It really makes me think about all the things I've seen in my relatively short life here on earth....great job!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I want to see...
The face of a new born,
the smile of a lover.
Nice write.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A very good poem. In a life we will learn many things. I like the examples of things missed and not to be seen. A strong ending to the outstanding poem.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Alex Vidmar
Alex Vidmar

Wakefield, RI



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