Tell Me Something.

Tell Me Something.

A Poem by Kiri J

 

Something in the way we speak

Makes me trip

Makes me fall

On the page

And my words fall out of my hands

I can feel this grey matter

Grey morning

Earl grey tea

 

And I’m scattered and I’m scattered

And I’m scattered and I’m scattered

 

You told me once it was easier to go.

 

 

 

Tell me something

When I came

Did you fall

On my page?

Your words fell out of my hands

I can feel this, feel guilty

Feel gorgeous

Feel you in me

 

And I’m scattered and I’m scattered

And I’m scattered and I’m scattered

 

You told me once it was easier to go

You told me once you were stupid to

Let me go

 

Tell me something

Does she know?

© 2008 Kiri J


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This is maybe about some sort of affair? I'm not totally sure, but it seems that way. This guy appears undecided on his options, whether to stay with you or let you go. Interesting piece and one that leaves that added mystery lurking.
Take care, Cgris.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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A good piece with nice flow
Reveals lots about you but with not revealing every thing
Love it
Peace

Posted 13 Years Ago


Well written, I enjoyed the way
you put this piece together. It
flows with an uncertain quality.
nicely done....

Posted 13 Years Ago


Very nice :) ... let it go , don't care if she knows Yossi

Posted 13 Years Ago


What a beautiful song to start my morning off with. Thank you for that Kiri.
Happy weekend!

Antonio

Posted 14 Years Ago


Sounds like a song. Love the repetition, especially and I'm scattered. I also like the line you once told me it was easier to go. Great stuff. I like the way you use the emotion of the relationship as the entry into art. It is what makes this poem special.

Posted 15 Years Ago


What a marvelously written piece of writing

I enjoyed each word and line; I could feel the emotion as I came to the end

Nicely done�


Posted 15 Years Ago


When I was young and not wise yet I walked away from more than one beautiful, honest woman. True hearts. Looking back from middle age at times I feel the powerful pangs of remorse. Yes remorse. Of course with age and wisdom comes the ability to reason and to let go. And so the remorse moves to acceptance and I move on.

Your poetry evokes Kiri. If you sing this lyric connected to your core emotions it will be powerful.

All the best.

Posted 15 Years Ago


I loved this piece, Great write keep up the great work. Orlando

Posted 15 Years Ago


I want to hear the music behind this. I want to hear you sing it. I want to be there.

Posted 15 Years Ago



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Kiri J
Kiri J

Melbourne, Australia



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I'm 22, Australian. I love music by the likes of Tori Amos, Imogen Heap, Regina Spektor, Sia, Amy Winehouse... Jeff Buckley, DCAB. I am a writer. I love rainy Sinatra-Sundays. I don't talk when I have.. more..

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Go to pray. Go to pray.

A Poem by Kiri J



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