What is Hell?

I wonder in school a little too much.

I sit in this room.

Melancholy races down the walls,

Drowning me in darkness.

Although I am forlorn about dying,

All worries efface away.

Then I feel a nibbling.

The lies prick at my skin,

Trying to seduce me with their gifts;

But I shall not give in.

I have waited too long.

The nights where full of demons and monsters,

Threatening to overtake my dreams.

But I still have a question.

If this is life,

Then what is Hell?

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Sorry about the words; just want to express the power of my thoughts.

Reviews

i think i can answer that..... hell is when you cant eat from some thing.... and there is no cats nore kittys and that there is hell oh and every one is running around burning

[mamachansensei]

ten times worse than this. maybe even worse but monsters can be stomped now while we are on earth.

[Ubiquitous]

Never apologize for your words, they are part of the art. In this case, your words enhance the complicated feeling your poetry shows. The ending ties together the ends of this piece flawlessly. Well done!

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

nice descriptions!

[Jenni-Chan]

Even Worse than that.

[TheKaylaPup]

Understanding the trying to use "strong words" to add to the point in this, but i don't think it does. I think sating it as "Then what is Hell?" would still carry the same force, and if anything would be stronger, for achieving that impact without curse words. That's just my opinion. Aside from that, I think it is fantastic, pessimistic and horrible thoughts, but an amazing poem.

[Robert Haigh]

A piquant poem to ponder. I think most of us feel like this at some time in our lives.

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

What a poem, and a stunning powerful ending...

[SwagMaster]

This poem really makes you think..........you are an excellent writer