Burn in Flame

A simple poem I wrote about finding a small part of hope.

Self-discovery in order to find,
That which is plaguing my mind,
A struggle for breath in drowning water,
A chance of life in this day's slaughter,
The touch of rain when I'm burning in flame.

This battle, this war, this vicious fight,
Years gone by, yet no end in sight,
Pilled relief from this incessant pain,
A cure for this disease with no goddamn name,
The touch of rain when I'm burning in flame.

Empty shell walking, too scared to feel,
Stretched at the seams, it's part of the deal,
To offer yourself with no thought of you,
It's a bittersweet curse, yet beautiful too,
I've found my breath in that deep blue sea,
I've found my chance, no death for me,
I've found my pill, I've found my cure,
I've found my rain when I burn in flame.

Author's Note

If anybody goes onto the site, this poem was also uploaded by myself on my account on ibuzzle.com

Reviews

[Pete]

this really touched me deep inside in places we don't talk about. it is troubling but beautiful at the same time. great write ...

"The smallest seed of faith is better than the largest fruit of happiness." - Thoreau

"There is no value in life except what you choose to place upon it and no happiness in any place except what you bring to it yourself." - Thoreau

[Chris]

a path of discovery - shared? or via solitude?

[J Todd Underhill]

I enjoyed your poem, should you be interested I do a daily podcast call Coffee With Underhill and would love a submission sent to [email protected]

[Kovarian]

Sorry for the late reply, what sort of submission piece are you wanting?

[J Todd Underhill]

Any General poetry... We do not air any hate speech or the magical F bomb but we are open other than that.

[KCthelastboyscout]

Great metaphors.this is beautiful to read from start to finish.Its hard to look within ourselves and be happy with what we find sometimes

[poetgurl (Plainly Meg)]

Wow, very strong intriguing write

[Kovarian]

Thank you so much!

[emipoemi]

...... O - M - Freaking - G!! I have no words....my voice is in my awe!! Well done!

[Kovarian]

Thank you so much!