Violence

hate is learned

Violence

Come, come children, come and learn from us

How to kill a man for no real cause

Take a seat children, this will not take long

Let me quickly show you how this is done

Some may cry “violence!” We call it peace 

Shoot the women, kill the kids

Take their homes, take their freedom

Drop the bombs, end and destroy the entire nation 

 Don’t you worry children, this is your mission

There is no violence, just execution

Pull out your guns, toss out the grenades

Pile the bodies; leave them to dig the graves

 Oh children, fear not your mutilated body

Pray for no gods, hope for nothing holy

Blood will drip, wounds won’t heal, 

Come children is time to kill.

Hear now children, praises will fall with each bullet case

Watch while life fades away, with pain stamped on the face

This is what you must do children, kill!

This is not violence…… We call this peace.

Reviews

[tmasse]

' Don’t you worry children, this is you mission' doesnt make sense, consider:
Don’t you worry children, this is your mission
Don’t worry children, this is your mission
Don’t you worry children, this is the mission
etc.

[Robert Gluzman]

Aye bro, this is sick! The message is very good, and they use of rhyming works here.
However, you may want to work on your rhythm more.

Example: "Don’t you worry children, this is you mission
There is no violence, just execution" -------- Meeeh not only the second line is too short but its too general too. Be a bit more specific- 'just justifiable execution'

[ksscampos]

Cool man.. thanks for the feedback.. much obliged.

[lovelife]

What a great peace made want to keep reading. Keep up the good work

[ksscampos]

Thank you very much

[lovelife]

ur very welcome

[Nikki]

:) I know EXACTLY what you mean.

[Su' Nacnetaf]

"We call this peace"... defying, pretty much enjoyed reading this piece. Kind of gives the feeling as if a priest is the narrator (or so I felt), which made it a bit darker (but greater) for me. Good writing, thanks for sharing.

[ksscampos]

thank you. i felt the need to scrutinize today's militarist culture. Thats the beauty of writing, the readers is allowed to perceive the material as it suits them. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem.

[Alexx]

You are killing it. Keep it up PLEASE!

[ksscampos]

Thank you.. very excited to hear amazing feedbacks..