father, a salesman

Father, a salesman

(the inspiration of this poem came from the first line from"Karl C Klein’s Unnatural Girl"whose stories published at www.karlcklein.gather.com and www.writerscafe.org/writers/karlklein/ should be read by serious readers) :

My father was a salesman.

That was all and that was all.

Memory did not recall

The commodities he sold.

The houses of his visits,

The shops or the offices.

 

A little pack of blue and

Obsolete face-crème once found

In an ancient attic…

“Had it been in his torn bag?”

Fingers wanted to trace his

Print of past long dead and gray.

 

The summer roads and shut doors

The watching bird with lazy

Wings folded together,

Oh sun, was it a journey

He had taken many times?

 

Only at night beside a

Wild and black mare he appeared.

“What were you?” asked a boy, me!

“Go and inquire your deep dream”,    

 Told the dying out image.

 

I know he was a salesman!

 

Reviews

[JC Fox]

This was wonderful, I love how another person's work can inspire your own work! There was another author on here that I highly enjoyed but I don't think he is here anymore and I can't find the work thanks to the big crash. Thanks for sharing this wonderful poem.

[T. R. Writer]

This is very dreamy and flows nicely. It really those accent your writing strengths.

[ganymeder]

Nice imagery. I like the part about finding the face creme. I can visualize that happening.

[Janelle Walden]

sorry it took so long for me to read this..i disappeared for a while then had to replace all my stuff, now i'm finally trying to get to some read requests--i usually don't read poems, more of a novel girl, but i decided to check it out & i must say, nicely done :)

[An Ordinary Woman]

poddarkushal, you did good with i enjoyed it.

"Go and inquire your deep dream",
Told the dying out image.
I know he was a salesman!... Very Nice work!

I haven't heard much from you, how are you?

[Constance]

This reminds me of that old play, Death of A Salesman, too. You have a vision that obviously reaches beyond your own experience. Thank you for your work.

[thecoolone52]

it was a tubular piece nice wrote bro~!

[E. M. Murren]

Wow... what a powerful work. Really well written. I love how you worked off the the other piece so well. Many cheers.

[PhoeniX]

enjoyed the way it was told as a tale. this was good as always my friend. imagery was good here

[Carrie Montgomery]

as always wondeful images.
"Had it been in his torn bag?He had taken many times?What were you?" all questions we ask ourselves of our parents, grandparents, ancestors...we all search for a history to explain "us" .

[Cece]

we gather our muse where we can get them
i have many sources of my muses
and i find many here on wc