I Took Too Long

The Prodigal's Return

I know this is hurting you

my being everything you prayed i don't turn into.

I can't even remember the counsel i swore i'd adhere to

but i want you to bless me...is it possible?

You see i have gifts and talents yet untapped

and with you ever present, my mind convinces me i'm trapped

so i must escape from my security

the one i know your love always made available to me.

In a few years when i'm battered and bruised,

when the lights that drew me have destroyed all i had that was of use

i'll remember the tears and the pain in your eyes

as you begged mule-headed me to save my goodbyes.

Thus i'll turn around, with the sudden dawning of an epiphany;

if i return to you, surely you'd forgive me?

But disappointment would be the only one awaiting my last step

because as it turns out, all your waiting would make you weary till in eternity, you slept.

Reviews

[Neon]

Sounds good .. would ya like to explain a bit more about the theme if you don't mind?

[Kwiksie Ifediora]

Gladly. Basically, if you've ever heard the Bible story of the prodigal son, it's pretty along the same path.
The summary of the poem is basically of a young (probably adolescent) person, convinced they're completely aware of all there is to know about life and the world and refuses to heed any counsel however heartfelt, birthed by experience from the parent. Counsel ignored, desires and dreams pursued, the individual finds that the fuss made was unnecessary and regrets the rejection of the love that tried to protect them from all the disappointment encountered. But despite the final realisation of the gravity of the mistakes already made, it was too late to return to make restitution because the parent was already dead.

[Neon]

No .. I didn't read that .. but your explanation has cleared things up! Thanks for clearing the doubts. You really have a great talent!

Keep on!

[Kwiksie Ifediora]

Thank you immensely for your encouraging words. They're much appreciated. :)

[Eddie Phillips]

I liked it. I thought your flow was a little hindered at first but it got better as it progressed. I think that actually works with the poem. Great job on crafting this piece.

[Kwiksie Ifediora]

Thanks a bunch Eddie.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Children! Who would have them if they could predict such angst? It seems, a friend of mine counselled me yesterday, children find it easy to fall out with parents because it is safe because the bond will always be there.

[Kwiksie Ifediora]

True in some cases. :) Thanks plenty for stopping by John.