Whole

Lend me your eyes,

So i can take a break from mine.

Lend me your hand,

So i can travel to a distant wonderland.

Lend me your smile,

So i can stash all my pain in one pile.

Lend me your mind,

So it is only freedom that i find.

Lend me your soul,

So i can finally become whole.

Reviews

[Forever Hidden]

Rhymes. HOW CAN YOU MAKE WORDS RHYME?! Takes time for me! ;)

[deepblue04]

I like how you used bits of what the human body uses just to experience life as it is. I agree with this poem, we need time away from reality and let us be ourselves. Good work!

[GreenIvy]

Thank you :)

[Walker Andreasen]

Isn't it true at how sometimes we just want to escape? Good job on expressing this common emotion. But I love how you broke it down. How instead of just saying, "oh I wish I was that person, they have it easy." you did it from a completely different stand point. Bravo. Writing points for you.

[GreenIvy]

Thank you so much. :)
Your review is very much appreciated :)

[Aehr]

well written. I enjoyed the depth of the poem. Emotions can be felt in here... loved this one too!

[GreenIvy]

Thank you :)

[Aehr]

anytime! :)