dying

im dying here

im fading fast

but im not going

to let them see

me break down

and never come back

im not going to

let them see

my pain and

my fear

i will just let my wrists see it

the blood is flowing 

fast and warm and red

i cant stop it

it wont stop coming

its starting to go dark

whats happening

im dying

and fading even faster

no one is here

theyll find me later

and laugh at the sight

they always said

i should end this life.....

.... help me

Reviews

[~ Otto Girl ~]

This poem is very very strong i See that you have alot of emotion To this but when your sad that what you think of. I can relate to this.

[Twichi ^.^]

amazingly written....can relate

[chaotic katie]

wow this was really deep, soooooooo much emotion this is really good keep writing

[Johnny Westbrook]

So much pain, suffering, loneliness, and depression. you gave so much detail that it was kinda scary. K i hope you don't do that :(
I also know that pain you talk about though and i think you already know that. So always know that i'm here when u need someone to talk to. But also even though this worried me about you, it is a great write.

[Mason]

Such pain and suffering...I condemn any of those who would laugh at the sight of a corpse or those who would wish someone dead, or blatantly state that they should.
There are those in this world who would see us dead, but there are also those who would see us live our life to its fullest. If you need someone like that, I would be more than willing to apply for the position.
Thank you for sharing.

[(:]

This formed an image in my head.
It was so very sad, but beautiful.

[Harley Ann]

This vision of myself lying on the floor, my own wrists streaming blood, it's come true, though never quite enough blood for me to be Dying...
You're not alone. It may be a morbid subject, but it's one that brings people together, people that can learn from each other.
Except for the one flaw that keeps being pointed out, "blood" rather than "vlood" (simple slip of the fingers, its understandable) it's really good. could flow a little better, but still good.keep writing..

[Carmen Garcia]

this is very well-written and i love you Kaelyn. i'm always here for you.

[deeps]

i will just let my wrists see it
the vlood is flowing

I hope you mean blood!
This is depressing really but written well
you express yoruself well.

[The Water Queen]

I dont know if you meant to vlood or if it was blood. But if it was meant to be blood it should be changed. Otherwise this poem is great. I love it.