You...

Inspired by Breaking Benjamin's 'You' For the one that causes me constant turmoil.

This contridiction is something that slips,
As constant as our swaying hips.
Slumbers within a bottomless dark void
Hollowed out and cold,
Don't feel, Don't show, Don't let them see...
Sugar crystals of spitting rain,
Tells of the real thoughts people gain.
As the blizzard rages on,
My feelings are closest to the Ice Queen's song
And perhaps forever after
As my body, my heart freezes over.
Just the soul left,
I vow it shan't be torn assunder
For whatever magick resides in me I strike all with thunder.
Just let the soul alone.
Let the soul alone lest it wonder
As a banshee and its ever unsated hunger...

Reviews

[Vidya Bacchus]

This is truly awesome my friend.Your words are filled with feeling and penned so brilliantly.I loved this :)

[No one]

Wauw i think the story we both try to tell is similar! I recognize myself in this, i like it a lot

[L4rn13]

Thank you for taking the time to review my poem :) Yes I think our styles are quite similar but I think you grasp the ability to express you emotions clearer with the words you use as they provide good imagery too

[No one]

Thanks, but your first language is probably English and mine isn't, so i like the different word choice. Mine is maybe easier to tread because of my basic words but that makes yours more interesting!! Don't doubt yourself, it's very good in my opinion ;)

[Simon Welsh]

Powerful. I love your poetry.