Blush

my fingers itch to impart

inky lines upon pale pages

for your pleasure

 

 

 

A wanton need fulfilled when

wrapped metaphors shroud me

in mystery

and veiled intentions wear clever disguises

 

 

 

cloaked in lace imagery

I prettily beg to be peeled back

layer by layer

to expose that hidden and secret

inner core

 

 

 

I blush

 

 

 

I need you

 

 

 

only you can undress me

gently pry apart my lines

tenderly palpate stanzas

and oh so lovingly

coax my intentions

to the surface

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Frieda P]

This simultaneously made me gasp and sigh at the same time, it's that freaking good! Your sensual strokes most certainly tickle these pages and I dare say many poets can relate to this euphoria whilst longing to be understood. We write for our souls but we birth these tokens in hope that we connect with others. This is bliss from thy pen LA, now... that's what I call 'blowing my skirt up'!

[LA Lorena]

Thanks for the high praise Frieda, it means a lot coming from you! Now pull your skirt back down, I don't want to be held responsible for you catching draft. ;)

[Frieda P]

Ha do you think anyone ever said that to Marilyn? ;-)

My pleasure, phenomenal piece of poetry!

[Forest Green]

Enchanting...layered in nice thoughts and consequential musings...

very nice..

[LA Lorena]

thank you Daniel. I can feel you smiling. ;)

[Distant horizons]

Superb.

[LA Lorena]

thank you my dear green one. ;)

[Ken Simm.]

Sensual and explicit metaphor if there can be such a thing. I think you have proved that there can. And proved it very well

[LA Lorena]

thank you Ken. I am rather enjoying the departure from my usual rhyme and rythym, and exploring new freedom in free verse's varying beat and tempo. I'm delighted that my experimentation is being well received. :)

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

I do believe after reading this that those pages you hold so dear have heart's beating in tune with your own just awaiting the stroke from the ink of your soul.

[LA Lorena]

thank you Neva. for the kind words and for the add to your favourites. It is the highest praise coming from you. :)

[writing mojo]

so this is how pen and paper make whoopee.....? I think this blushes sexual tones, but inks it's self in a deeper meaning of being one with the inspiration of live and climax being slowly sketched into a form..great piece... how was Mexico?

[LA Lorena]

Thanks Mojo! My vacation was wonderful! hot and sunny every day, it was just a shame having to come back to snow and ice!

[Aidz]

with a single feather, a quill if you must, shall I inscribe this ink upon your skin, from your lips silkenly tracing the contours until it reaches your well to replenish this soul

[LA Lorena]

such a beautiful and poetic review Aidz. xx

[kublakhan27]

Pardon me while I drown in my own sweat...

[LA Lorena]

LOL! shall I throw you a life preserver then? I'll not be responsible for any fatalities! thanks for dropping by.

[kublakhan27]

You're most welcome :) Floatation devices maybe? Nah, that's a lame joke ;P I'd rather die happy haha

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAutho..]

Mr. Dickwad gives it two thumbs-up! :D What?! Non-rateable? Darn! ...and here I was going to throw in this steamy towel... at least a 100 degrees beyond mildly passionate.

[LA Lorena]

ROFLMAO! Dickwad is one of my favourite expressions! I love that you have incorporated it into a review! Thank you!

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAuthor]

Hey! You don't remember do you? You helped me embrace my dickwadishness a while back over at Kimmer's place. ;-)

[LA Lorena]

I know I have seen you here before and loved a review comment that you left for someone, but I don't remember you being a dickwad. Are you? ;)

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAuthor]

Umm, perhaps I should ask for your definition first. ;-)
REF: http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/KAOlmsted/1100888/?&p=2

[LA Lorena]

Oh yes, I see now. I actually called you a dickwad. my bad! LOL! You do know that I was teasing right?

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAuthor]

The "sensitive" side of me was certainly hoping that was the case!! :D Either way, great write, this one. ^_^

[LA Lorena]

Well thank you UFO. I appreciate your kind words. I was playing, honest. Ask anyone here, they'll vouch for me being a sweet natured tease, as opposed to a mean-a*s b***h. :D

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAuthor]

I believe you. In fact, if the music on your profile is any indication, then you've got a bit of country/cowgirl soul somewhere inside... good for twang'n heartstrings and making people smile when they're down on their luck & such. An angel with pluck and a sense of humor.

[LA Lorena]

pluck and humour in spades, but the angel part might be a bit of a stretch. ;)

The music on my profile is a Canadian band, one of my faves. I love that song!

[Horizon K.]

Wow, this was a most gorgeous sensual expression of the desire to connect to others through our writings.. unveil the mysteries of our metaphors... And I agree completely with Frieda's fantastic review.

And what's more profound for me is when I have a feeling percolating, a poem desiring to be written, and then I happen across someone else's poem on WC that expresses what I wanted to express, of course in a way my own mind would never compose, beautiful not only for its writing but because I know someone else feels so too...

[LA Lorena]

Thank you Horizon, that is very sweet and kind of you to say. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem, and can relate.

[Arthur Henn]

Beautiful!

[LA Lorena]

Thank you Arthur, I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)