another little self-talk

another little self-talk

A Poem by LJ
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second try at this poem, also helped by max, a 'real' poet

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step up to the plate

electronic or paper

lined or not there are

still margins boundaries

wiggle as you set your

cleats firmly into the

topic point your pen

--over the fence

--out of the park

this one's for Chaucer

keep your eye on the

and --Swing--

at the ball the subject

your metaphorical bat

swings high and a

miss one strike one out

loose bat almost hits

the ink well the

catcher wants to fight

ink splatter everywhere

crumple the page

second at-bat all the

same metaphor

the same bat and ball

though few folks swing

so consistently missing

the point as you do

© 2020 LJ


Author's Note

LJ
More baseball this time; more about writing, too.
What do you think?
Thanks for reading!

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I love baseball, grew up in NY with the Yanks, Dodgers and Giants...
the subject of this poem wanted to be the Babe Ruth of poetry and wound up being less than Mighty Casey.
I love the catcher's reaction...the ink splatter...
I have been known to strike out, missing the point as well.
thank you for this delightfully creative piece of writing, L.J.
I am going to read it again, but first put on my 1929 St. Louis Browns cap.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

LJ

1 Year Ago

Thank you! I love your reaction to this piece. You cover all bases. (:



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I really like this. The ending is kind of humorous.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

LJ

11 Months Ago

I'm glad you like this and I appreciate how much. Also, the ending is meant to be "kind of humorous".. read more
light and ashes

11 Months Ago

Well, it succeeded, and you're welcome. 😆 Thank you for stopping by my page too.
It's hit and miss with baseball as it is with writing; I love how you intertwined the two, with a delightful piece of writing. Fondly, Betty

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

LJ

11 Months Ago

Thank you! Your comments are always helpful.
I love baseball, grew up in NY with the Yanks, Dodgers and Giants...
the subject of this poem wanted to be the Babe Ruth of poetry and wound up being less than Mighty Casey.
I love the catcher's reaction...the ink splatter...
I have been known to strike out, missing the point as well.
thank you for this delightfully creative piece of writing, L.J.
I am going to read it again, but first put on my 1929 St. Louis Browns cap.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

LJ

1 Year Ago

Thank you! I love your reaction to this piece. You cover all bases. (:

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Tags: baseball, poetry, metaphor

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