Ghost Stories

Ghost Stories

A Poem by LJ
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This happened years ago: an old piece that hopefully still packs a punch, esp with help.

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what can I do?

This morning everything hurts.


I read a book then another; my library is full of them.

I surf the web; my work, news, window to the world.

I enjoy the art I have collected over time on my walls.

I live not just survive food water shelter all provided.


(but) This morning everything hurts.


I am but one of a twin yet where is my sister?

Seven miles distant seen once a year is this time and space infinite?

Another sister traveling in Europe but where?

Absent unseen who sends cards saying nothing from around the world?


Father, where are you? I miss you.

Mother, I cannot see you. I am lost.

You are not in those mausoleums.

I deny this reality �" I still want you.


Where is my child? Hiding from MS, and escaping her pain today?

“Venting” she calls it, inside the “fortress of solitude” of her parked car.

How on earth can I help her? no cure, no respite, no cessation of it all

Where are you, I call? Is she lost too? Gone now and angry, she vents


Where are my nephews who live so close?

Do they also wait through the infinite year to be seen?

The three are the last of any family I may claim...

Why do I feel though, that none of these claim me in return?


This morning everything hurts.

but

What can I do?

© 2020 LJ


Author's Note

LJ
Does this seem too intense?
Do you think there are too many different ideas here?
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this indeed seems little too intense and ya, every new idea in very another stanza that one comes across ... I did like the poem, you know what, the poem did not sound as if you were concentrating only on your sister or say , only on mother or father... The importance was evenly distributed and the line that repeatedly come " this morning everything hurts" gave a very nice outline to the overall idea. but the questions being constantly asked can be improved I guess, But overall the poem is just too good!

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Aradhana

11 Months Ago

Ya I understand that during an unhappy state of mind there are questions more than other talks that .. read more
LJ

10 Months Ago

Thanks again! I understand what you mean. Hopefully you might read a few more poems I wrote and mayb.. read more
Aradhana

10 Months Ago

Yaa sure it'll be my pleasure!!



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i love the intensity! i like your imagery and i actually enjoy the lack of focus on one particular subject. it's like a hazy understanding of your character's situation, and remembering one thing at a time. love it

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

LJ

10 Months Ago

thanks! it's nice to please a person with this kind of personally emotional poetry, and i'm glad to .. read more
this indeed seems little too intense and ya, every new idea in very another stanza that one comes across ... I did like the poem, you know what, the poem did not sound as if you were concentrating only on your sister or say , only on mother or father... The importance was evenly distributed and the line that repeatedly come " this morning everything hurts" gave a very nice outline to the overall idea. but the questions being constantly asked can be improved I guess, But overall the poem is just too good!

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Aradhana

11 Months Ago

Ya I understand that during an unhappy state of mind there are questions more than other talks that .. read more
LJ

10 Months Ago

Thanks again! I understand what you mean. Hopefully you might read a few more poems I wrote and mayb.. read more
Aradhana

10 Months Ago

Yaa sure it'll be my pleasure!!

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Added on August 21, 2020
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Tags: loss, family, poetry, questions, separation, love

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