I Really Don't Know

I Really Don't Know

A Poem by LJ
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facts and fancies

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My tears are not like precious diamonds
My eyes do not sparkle with joy
My frown is only a furrow on my brow

My personality is not like a jewel
I don't often make witty comments
Very little wit is found within it

I have no large anime eyes
My mouth is nothing like a rose bud
Neither is it called generous

My white skin is not like alabaster or moon
I wasn't born with a silver spoon
My body isn't muscular, reedy or in shape

My chin is not pointy nor is it strong
My hair is far too unreasonably long
And I never know all the words to a song

I cannot usefully turn straw into gold
Nor quicken that which is icy cold
I can't pretend to be young when I'm old

I cannot hear the nightingale sing
Only a crow's call enters my ears
And sometimes there is ringing I can't explain

I am not cool, beautiful, fascinating, brilliant
I'm also not finished nor have a clue
Except maybe that's how we sail on through

© 2022 LJ


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My mother used to say, when I acted Goo-fee, that the hospital sent the wrong kid home with her. To which I always responded, "Yeah, well maybe so. But now you're stuck with me because they have a no-return policy, and I'm all you're going to get. --- Then she'd hug me, hmm, Mothers! --- hmm, life. --- This poem was exceptional, moving on a personnel level. --- Thanks!

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This is really emotive--it feels quite raw and much more genuine for it. You have some wonderful lines in here:
'I cannot usefully turn straw into gold
Nor quicken that which is icy cold
I can't pretend to be young when I'm old"

My favourite lines are these:

"I am not cool, beautiful, fascinating, brilliant
I'm also not finished nor have a clue
Except maybe that's how we sail on through"

Thank you for sharing this.


Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

LJ

1 Year Ago

The lines you chose to highlight here are favorites of mine, too - though I really didn't know it un.. read more
My mother used to say, when I acted Goo-fee, that the hospital sent the wrong kid home with her. To which I always responded, "Yeah, well maybe so. But now you're stuck with me because they have a no-return policy, and I'm all you're going to get. --- Then she'd hug me, hmm, Mothers! --- hmm, life. --- This poem was exceptional, moving on a personnel level. --- Thanks!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Welcome to the world of normal people with all their imperfections and learn to celebrate the wonder of you.

Chris

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You are extraordinarily ordinary...which is the best way to be...separately the flaws might show, but as an entire package you are what we all wish to be...human.

j.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

LJ

1 Year Ago

Haha - thank you kindly. It's an old piece, but felt right at the moment. I don't know whether to re.. read more
jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

I think sometimes we tend to overwork pieces to the point that they lose their natural quality and f.. read more
LJ

1 Year Ago

That is true, and thank you again. Guess I'll leave it.
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Woah! Back into reality. As writers we often hype a lot of things but this is so cool! It's like yeah this actually keeps happening and then we really don't know... 😄. I'm happy I got to read this!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

LJ

1 Year Ago

And I'm happy you read it and left a comment, thank you very much! I'll try to get by your work soon.. read more

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i am testing this to see what it's all about now. i used to write here years ago, and enjoyed it very much. i wrote fiction mostly, and many reviews for other writers. i made friends, and hope to agai.. more..

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