Pulsating

Pulsating

A Poem by LKBillips

Pulsating

My hand outstretched in a gentle hold
I feel the rhythm taking hold
It’s gentle yet forceful
It’s persistent yet malleable

I feel it’s hope it’s despair
I feel the years of yearning in all its valves
Weary yet vibrant it continues its beat
Never yielding never failing

I dream of its eternal bliss
Never really reaching its potential but never giving up
I’d give forever for that moment
Stifling longing keeps me active
But ever out of reach keeps me hopeless

Only a matter of time before one wins out
Shall it be positivity
God bless me that it is
For all else is failure.
LK Billips

© 2018 LKBillips


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This is a compelling read, since your words have a palpable urgency. I love the way you alternate between positive & negative observations, all intensely-stated, to SHOW how sensations pulsate. Since I'm bipolar, when my mood is about to leap or plummet, there's a pulsating anticipation exactly like you've described here. Whether I'm going up or down, there's a swooshing anticipation, even when I'm not anticipating anything! You really nailed that sensation (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

LKBillips

3 Years Ago

Thanks Margie. This was one of those crazy night. Words flowing so fast you had to get them down b.. read more



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This piece has the potential to be a really well-read work. I would suggest sometimes using punctuation to accentuate phrasing, meter, and rhythm. For instance, (and this is just a suggestion), you could change the following to :
"I feel it’s hope, it’s despair.
I feel the years of yearning in all its valves,
weary, yet vibrant, it continues its' beat.
Never yielding.
Never failing."

Or something to like the above. I look forward to seeing you grow as a writer!

Cheers!

-JB-

Posted 1 Year Ago


Sounds like ya got ya finger on the pulse of life... nicely writ... N

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

very fun to read for me. everything fit together. i enjoyed the flow and creativity :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

LKBillips

3 Years Ago

Thanks Team Rocket! It was one of those middle of the night writes. :)
Saree Marcel

3 Years Ago

AHA! you reconize them!!!!!!! YEEESSSSSS
My favourite, and standout line in this piece is "Weary yet vibrant it continues its beat." It tells so much in that line that we can all relate to. It seems more and more we suffer silently and wear our masks well, hoping that tomorrow will be less of one and more of the other. But if experience tells us anything, the positives that can change our perspectives so dramatically, also come out of the blue. Life is really nothing more than constant coin tosses that we hope with our last, will have a run of win-streaks included...Hopefully.
Beautifully written piece, full of emotion of lows and hopes of highs.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

LKBillips

3 Years Ago

Thanks so much Lorry! I really appreciate the review and glad you found it relatable.
Lorry

3 Years Ago

You're welcome.
This is a compelling read, since your words have a palpable urgency. I love the way you alternate between positive & negative observations, all intensely-stated, to SHOW how sensations pulsate. Since I'm bipolar, when my mood is about to leap or plummet, there's a pulsating anticipation exactly like you've described here. Whether I'm going up or down, there's a swooshing anticipation, even when I'm not anticipating anything! You really nailed that sensation (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

LKBillips

3 Years Ago

Thanks Margie. This was one of those crazy night. Words flowing so fast you had to get them down b.. read more

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