Kiss Me

Kiss Me

A Poem by Lacuna Badtz
"

Kiss me until it kills.

"

The way you move is criminal.

Your skin, your sighs, like paradise.

Spellbound to your every limb.

Kiss me until it kills.


The welcoming of your shadowing lies

captures me, chains me to you.

All that is left is flesh and despair;

Dirty little thrills

.

Heart pounding, words aren’t left unspoken.

Bed springs scream at the top of their lungs.

High off your sinister dreams, on cloud nine.

You're such a pretty little pill.


In the heat of the moment,

in the loss of translation,

in the depths of desire;

Kiss me until I'm ill.

© 2014 Lacuna Badtz


Author's Note

Lacuna Badtz
Please let me know what you think. If you leave me a review I will review one of your poems. Thanks, xo.

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I was hooked in by the first stanza. It is by far the strongest. The subsequent stanzas are less good and I think could be made better by jettisoning the fourth line of each: thrills, pill, ill. By substituting the fourth line of the first stanza as a refrain "Kiss me until it kills" in each stanza the poem acquires a greater gravity. Otherwise, well done. I will certainly read some more of your work.

Posted 4 Years Ago


I really like your poem.... in the deepths of desire kiss me until I am ill .... this is just so beautiful! ''the kisses can heal and kill '' very well done.

Posted 4 Years Ago


First off, I hate to see someone as warm as you get killed just cause of "Kiss" lol So, be safe!
And second off, I adore this poem because you've raise some fire into the bottom of my heart penning such kinda warm words, am feeling if an angel's standing before my eyes n she's speaking up to me what you penned in this poem then how should I react? cause, if an angel onself wants to get kissed by me then how can this devil refuse her beautiful offer? No way! I'd love to kiss her but I'd hate to make her ill cause, if she becomes ill then who'd again ask me for such kinda "Kisses!" Lol so that's all I think!

You are passionate, passionate about love indeed!
You've got a warm heart so, stay warm n heat it up! You this poem's really very warm!
Keep up the great work!

Posted 5 Years Ago


Very impressive...feel the emotions...both good and bad...love me , thrill me, kiss me , kill me...good stuff, cant wait to read more...

Posted 5 Years Ago


My goodness idk where to begin Lacuna!!!! Wow I think this write is screaming:) I loved it friend remind me of an old tv commercial ill have to find it on youtube.

Posted 5 Years Ago


That is truly nice... and yeah a kiss is a nice idea hehe..
well done..i liked this :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


I thought I was listening to Avril L...here with this verse...
Leaves nothing out of the imagination...
all thrill and action...
you must of been in the moment...
when you wrote this one...


Posted 5 Years Ago


Absolutely beautiful! I particularly like your use of imagery and personification, overall it's just so passionate, and flows really well. I love it :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


Beautifully yearning in poetic words...a lovely write from heart and soul...a splendid read indeed. :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


This is so passionate. I love your work

Posted 5 Years Ago


Lacuna Badtz

5 Years Ago

Thank you for the review :)
Savanna

5 Years Ago

welcome :D

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Lacuna Badtz
Lacuna Badtz

Malta, IL



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