The Right Kind of Moment

Free verse about falling for someone that wasn't who you thought...true story

I remember when we first met,

I was nineteen, and optimistic.

You were my boss, my leader.

Yet you were cool, and fun.

 

I was twenty, a little more smart.

You left me, to move on.

We were far apart,

Yet we kept close in touch.

 

I was twenty-one, a little more brave.

You came back, and left again.

Our reunion was brief,

Yet it made memories.

 

I was twenty-two, a little more cynical.

You were gone, but we found each other again.

Things were felt and known between us,

Yet words were not spoken.

 

I was twenty-three, a little more determined.

We finally went out on a ledge,

One moment that shouldn't have happened,

Yet played out like a movie scene.

 

Now, here we are.

Together in this moment.

We really can't change it,

Yet..do we really want to?

 

Author's Note

This is a free-verse, not quite meant to rhyme. This is a true event that happened to me.

Reviews

[JC]

i prefer this kind of poetry over rhymes, it is so natural, so real and therefore I can relate to it, how people come in and out of our lives and how we are different each time and it's like each time is new...really dig this.

[Michael G.]

I enjoyed the flow and the quiet passion behind this poem.
Free verse is what it is... a good way of expressing your emotions and thoughts without having to "force" a word to your feelings. You wrote this piece quite well.

[Ian Faraway]

I agree with Valette. It seems like you're on the defense and offense at once. You don't really know what to think of him but there is SOMETHING there. Well written.

[Valette]

I'm getting the sense that you are not sure how you feel about this man; whether this is a good thing or not. Perhaps a good title might be "I remember" or "Lost Innocent," depending how you feel.