No Surprise

No Surprise

A Poem by Brittni

I was at your door, out in the cold.

You told me 11:30, not a second late.

I reach up and knock, heart in my throat.

I was excited, yet oh so scared.

You said it was important, this talk.

It was about our friendship, our future.

I go to the window, just to peek.

To see if you were there, or not.

I saw her, wearing your shirt.

The one I bought you, the red one.

Her legs around your waist, your head back.

Was this a joke, a sick and disgusting trick?

Or was this your own way of trying to get answers?

I left, got into my car without another thought.

I should be mad, or upset and crying.

In my car, I dialed your phone.

Knowing you wouldn't answer, I waited.

The little beep was in my ear, your voicemail.

All I could say, the two little words.

The tone in my voice should have said it all.

I let out a breath and said, "No Surprise"

© 2012 Brittni

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this is the kind of poetry i dig the most, honest and bare and true, something we can all relate to, the things in life that can reach such profundity.

Posted 6 Years Ago

I actually found this interesting to read. Good job :)

Posted 7 Years Ago

Well it was a friendship but I know how how it feels to feel so betrayed and let down by all your dreams and desires ruined. J'adore!

Posted 8 Years Ago

Lovely piece, especially the ending! Well done.

Posted 8 Years Ago

Wow.. you did well by not going in there and killing both of them. lol I hope this is not a real incident but life is full of cruel jokes. This read very smoothly and the emotions are felt.

Posted 8 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Well written

Posted 8 Years Ago

I like poems that are stories, not abstract, and I like the way you tell this story,and the way you present it as a poem ( It would be a good piece of prose too) A sad story, hopefully not true, and a good piece of literature.

Posted 9 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Added on April 25, 2012
Last Updated on April 25, 2012



New Castle, PA

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