Undangled

Undangled
by Tricia Pattinson

The weakness of eyes
Is looking outside

Expecting the World
To be real and true
Believing is not proof all is real

In our eyes reflections pacify
Keeping minds occupied
Wrapped up and cuddled tight

And when we struggle as babies do
Our cries of blaming and finding fault
Is with the World and not ourselves

Important answers arrive alone
From shadowy basements hence they come

They climb the inner stairs of aware
To enliven and invigorate
To rescue us from mistakes

Like the mistake of attaching
To the Tree of Life
As temporary ornamentals
Dangling upside down
Looking ever outward

And yet we shine none the less

The real and true answers come
In the privacy of self revelation
Where we can treasure ourselves
And let go expecting ornamentality
To lead us to the God/dess

Leave the World's game of blame
Detach from the racks of torture's pain
Close your eyes
Open your heart

Allow the World to carry on
Allow yourself to accept you're free

Reviews

[Maglia Weaver Twill]

you said
"The real and true answers come
In the privacy of self revelation
Where we can treasure ourselves
And let go expecting ornamentality
To lead us to the God/dess"

I like it but I'm curious, What is ornamentality here to mean?

[Tricia Pattinson]

SEVERAL THINGS AT ONCE.. A PROP/DECORATION and a MENTALITY. Thanks for reading.

[Rocans]

Picked out some gems of truth from this poem. Like
" The weakness of eyes Is looking outside
Expecting the World
To be real and true
Believing is not proof all is real." This was very well put. And I thought those lines summed up the poem. Some of the lines struck me as odd as I have some of the same things in some of my own poems . Our thoughts on this subject definitely converge.
Perception is an interesting thing and sometimes introspection is more valuable than ocular observation.
Thanks for sharing, I liked this.

[Tricia Pattinson]

Glad you like / appreciate it. Let me know which lines were odd pls. Although I do admire your work tremendously, I'd highly upset to have "used" your work as my own. I do think we have some similar thoughts about this reality.

[Rocans]

no no don't get me wrong Tricia, your words are totally original in my eyes, its only the concept that is somewhat similar, and I am sure a whole LOT of ideas I have in my poems people have already explored them. But I think that's okay, the blessing of being an individual is the ability to explain the same concepts differently. For example someone writing about sorrow would describe it totally different from another person from a different background but the concept is the same "sorrow" I have no doubt that your words are of your own creation. I have already highlighted the lines I think most converge with my own beliefs. As I said I think this was a very good poem.