(Me) Ennui

(Me) Ennui

A Poem by Jamila
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True at first light.

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Staring at my bed
scrambled egg morn
on the
brain
frazzled stirrings
of night before
tantalise
insane
Lusting for a mocha
virgin lips
have yet to
kiss
questing for something
shadowed
yet still my mind's
amiss
Till lids like
hands of Moses
part my veil
wide
and there upon
crisp
white
bridal sheets
my
answer
did
reside.

© 2020 Jamila


Author's Note

Jamila
A little abstract, so thanx for reading!:)

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Have read all your poetry over the last few days, but have been waiting until I had a moment to comment. I like the way you string out a thought and your formatting lends this almost fishing line like effect where you pull the reader along. The thought stretches out and in doing so allows the reader to ponder.

Abstract is great, in my book, it allows room for the reader to find herself and discover something about the poet’s worldview simultaneously. Your title points to a conversation with self amidst a time of dullness, but the poem itself seems to be exploring the fading excitement of a dream. And facing the new day, perhaps there’s this push and pull between rising or staying in bed to explore the mind’s offerings a little more.

But, there are also just nice little images that allude to morning routine and can lead the reader in different directions. So I like that space in the poem. It’s like saying, here is the start of a day, what does it say to you.

Great poetry. I look forward to reading more of your work.

Posted 1 Month Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Jamila

1 Month Ago

Thanx, so much, dear Eilis! This was a lovely review, indeed! I was a little unsure of posting this .. read more



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This feels like the opposite of ennui! Nobody could feel boredom reading something like this becuz it's lively & imaginative. I love how topsy-turvy phrases like "scrambled egg morning" could refer to what's for breakfast, or it could be about feeling scrambled. This is the kind of whimsical word crafting that offers the reader many options, as far as interpreting each line (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamila

1 Week Ago

Thanx so much, Margie! Yes, this one is a little abstract and it has more of a personal meaning, but.. read more
Seems like waking from a lucid dream, maybe hungover - brain foggy taking time to soak in the surroundings - sometimes even a mocha won't help!
Lovely imagery, and a very enjoyable read.
Laura.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamila

3 Weeks Ago

Thanx so much, dear Laura! Haha! Not quite hungover here but something similar, yes! I like your tho.. read more
a metaphor of saving oneself for marriage...but being confused by the feelings.
Perhaps a clearer mind would have dreamed of a fried egg, sunny-side up...
but even the over-easy feeling is uneasy.
she dreams of that white dress...dreams of perfection.
but Moses parted the Red Sea and there was blood on his hands....even in the purest moments, there is darkness...really like that allusion in this.
I am with the others as far as abstract...i write much in abstract myself...but i want to allow my readers room...to view, to interpret, to relate.
you do that here.
j.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamila

3 Weeks Ago

Thanx so much, J! I very much enjoyed your thoughts on this poem. It takes the poem itself in anothe.. read more
jacob erin-cilberto

3 Weeks Ago

some poems just make me go on and on...i think that is a good thing...and nothing wrong with "scramb.. read more
Jamila

3 Weeks Ago

Was it?? That is hilarious! Great song, though. I love the Beatles myself.
Abstract offers the reader so much opportunity. The imagery here led me to several places. I liked that and found reading you pleasing. Good work Jamila.

Chris

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamila

1 Month Ago

Thanx very much! I hope this poem took you somewhere interesting in your musing! Much obliged for yo.. read more
Have read all your poetry over the last few days, but have been waiting until I had a moment to comment. I like the way you string out a thought and your formatting lends this almost fishing line like effect where you pull the reader along. The thought stretches out and in doing so allows the reader to ponder.

Abstract is great, in my book, it allows room for the reader to find herself and discover something about the poet’s worldview simultaneously. Your title points to a conversation with self amidst a time of dullness, but the poem itself seems to be exploring the fading excitement of a dream. And facing the new day, perhaps there’s this push and pull between rising or staying in bed to explore the mind’s offerings a little more.

But, there are also just nice little images that allude to morning routine and can lead the reader in different directions. So I like that space in the poem. It’s like saying, here is the start of a day, what does it say to you.

Great poetry. I look forward to reading more of your work.

Posted 1 Month Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Jamila

1 Month Ago

Thanx, so much, dear Eilis! This was a lovely review, indeed! I was a little unsure of posting this .. read more

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Tags: Poetry, confessional, self exploration, sleep, morn, ennui

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Jamila

Lyon, France



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