Palette

Palette

A Poem by Jamila
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Colours of life

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Black and blue
emotion
viole(n)t mauve
the bruise
bloody red
the anger
that lit the
tempers
fuse
acid green
the envy
ghostly white
the fear
yellow stars
concuss above
crystal clouds
of tear
greying
is the
memory
licorice twisted
is our
fate
for
orange blazes
from my
eyes
and
burns
on you
with
hate.

© 2020 Jamila


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Jamila
Thanx for reading! :)

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A very colorful offering here. What we are seeing beneath the vivid spectrum, though, is the tale of an abusive relationship. Each facet of negativity is color coded. Black and blue, violent mauve, bloody red, acid green, all the way down to orange blazes, all stand for things like bruises, bloodshed, envy and hate. I have the feeling the speaker was the recipient of the violence, which has resulted in hatred. I suggest the abuser sleep with one eye open.


Posted 3 Weeks Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Jamila

3 Weeks Ago

Thanx so much, dear John! You have nailed your review of this poem. A colourful poem to cover all th.. read more



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The shades of a sunrise with pale yellow and
lavender with a misty rain to mellow your day.
One needs to make their nest high in a tree
where negativity is only below where evil lurks
in shadows deep. And when the sun sets in orange
and peaceful tones... your head will rest on a branch
of lovely Rock-a-bye lullabies. truly, Pat

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamila

1 Week Ago

Thanx so much, dear Patricia! I enjoyed these lovely words. Glad to have made your acquaintance, mad.. read more
I don't know if i read you write or did you see red for wrongs well that's just not right:) as a person with some neurological processing issues its strange... but I rarely see red from synesthesia; lots of blues, yellows, whites and greens but almost never reds:? I just love your use of words you have such an interesting voice Jamilla always fun to red

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamila

1 Week Ago

Thanx so much, dear Robert! This one was just based on a personal experience, a rather frightening i.. read more
What a rainbow of
Dislike anger and hate
I'd hate to have you as a mate

Can you do a pleasant rainbow for us in these dreary days

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamila

2 Weeks Ago

Thanx so much, Wild Rose! I can assure you I am a very friendly mate to have. Not so much the person.. read more
Wild Rose

2 Weeks Ago

I thought you would be a nice person > But I suspect their could be times when you resemble your rai.. read more
The turn at the end puts a different face on the poem, for me. It feels like there's a bit of power being thrown back at the aggressor and there's something to that--like an embracing of one's own power to break out of abuse. Or maybe it's the inner storm clouds becoming so full they are no longer able to hold back the deluge. For me that pivot at the end makes this poem like two poems in one.

The victim bears many bruises and scars--lasting things that, even when they lessen or dissipate, remain within the psyche and color the future with the inner damage. Sometimes that inner, unseen damage leads to hate and acts of revenge or self-defense and others it leads to further abuse as the victim loses the value of self and succumbs again and again to the wiles of the abuser or a string of abusers. Have you read Natasha Trethewey's poetry about her mother's death at the hands of her abusive husband? She has written some very moving poetry as an outsider to action and mourner for her beloved mother.

Your poem is great because it sets off a string of thoughts. It's like the electrical neuron pulses moving down a line--new ideas keep firing. And we become embedded in the story even without exactly knowing what the story is. It makes an impression on the subconscious.

I like the way you create a foil with your title and the photo you've paired with the poem because the reader begins reading expecting something of beauty and life and by the end there's something more of understanding of the ways death creeps in. It's excellent work, Jamila.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamila

2 Weeks Ago

Thanx so much, dear Eilis! I love your in depth reviews! I took a look at some of Natasha Trethewey'.. read more
Silent palette contains so much emotions silently, my favourite is violet for that kills the negativity around me.
We need to be grateful to colours for letting us view the world in amusing ways. While some colours are demonic and some are soothing to eyes, all are essential.
Vibrant, colourful and true write. Be blessed💜

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamila

2 Weeks Ago

Thanx so much, Tahsin! Violet...or Mauve as we call it here in France, is in fact the colour of yout.. read more
Tahsin.Z🍁

2 Weeks Ago

You're very welcome😀🌸🌸
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Gee
A really well written poem on a not much touched on subject.
One of the best I have read in a while :))
Good morning Jamila, hope you are safe and well.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamila

2 Weeks Ago

Thanx so much, dear Gee! Your appreciation means a lot. Good morning to you and I hope you are stayi.. read more
wow! packs a punch (forgive me pun) it is a serious matter ... whenever i read about abuse ... it brings back to me just how horribly common it is .... even within the small circle of my own life to many women have and/or are been abused ... i worked as a RN in a hospital and most of my co-workers were women ... you have painted it so graphically ... the acid green, ghostly white and orange blazes are instant pictures of faces and rage and hurt .... the theme fits your style perfectly ... each line another right hook and body slam :((((((((((( the closing is smoldering ... i feel afraid she may do something that lands her in jail instead of him ... great title ... everything works for me in this one Jamila ...thanks for sharing
E.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamila

3 Weeks Ago

Thanx so much, dear E! I am sure as a nurse you did bear witness to the impacts of domestic violence.. read more
A very colorful offering here. What we are seeing beneath the vivid spectrum, though, is the tale of an abusive relationship. Each facet of negativity is color coded. Black and blue, violent mauve, bloody red, acid green, all the way down to orange blazes, all stand for things like bruises, bloodshed, envy and hate. I have the feeling the speaker was the recipient of the violence, which has resulted in hatred. I suggest the abuser sleep with one eye open.


Posted 3 Weeks Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Jamila

3 Weeks Ago

Thanx so much, dear John! You have nailed your review of this poem. A colourful poem to cover all th.. read more
I love this poem, using colors to show moods & feelings. There are many uninhibited phrases that pop with intensity. I have a personal issue with using the primary color words, which I find to be unimaginative . . . there are so many other ways to denote the colors, like how you used "licorice" instead of black, acid green envy, & ghostly white . . . but I still feel you could pump up the color words a bit more, since this is all about "Palette"! Melancholy melon . . . intriguing indigo . . . saucy sage! I want the biggest crayon box with ALL the unusual colors!!!! This is just my color bias & many people write with the primary colors so you can ignore me on this point (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamila

3 Weeks Ago

Thanx, Margie! I see your point in regards to word choice. My idea here was to convey words similar .. read more

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